Salamander's Breath

When a fire breaks out in Everfree Forest, it's up to Twilight Sparkle and Applejack to rescue Zecora and bring down the source of the flames, the destructive Salamanders. (Written For Feburary Fiction Writeoff)

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Bold Promise

Bold Promise #1 · Feb 22nd, 2012 · · ·

like it. Good job.

xgfhj

xgfhj #2 · Jul 6th, 2012 · · ·

That was a really good story; you definitely know how to characterize Twilight and wrote an exciting story. It stays very in character and 'close enough' to the world... but I would think it was almost traumatizing, good thing it wasn't.

JAG

JAG #3 · Oct 22nd, 2012 · · ·

Only two comments? Huh. Guess this must've just been buried in the flood of fire fics, and people never saw it. Which is unfortunate, because it's really good. As stated above, the characterization is very solid and believable. The action feels exciting and fast-paced, which seems hard to pull off with first-person perspective. You generally did a good job of capturing the danger of the situation.

My only gripe would be that we should've heard something about Zecora at the end of the story. Rescuing her what drove Twilight and AJ into the forest to begin with, so there should've been more of a resolution there.

That's not enough to hurt the story much, though. 4/5.

Biochi

Biochi #4 · Dec 14th, 2012 · · ·

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I agree with JAG. A solid fic, fun and exciting with good characterization. I especially liked the part with all of the farmer/earth ponies just standing prepared to fight the fire with what tools and resources they had, if necessary. Some sort of follow-up with Zecora would have been nice at the end.
Thanks for writing this.

RoyalBardofCanterlot