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A blizzard freezes the land of Equestria and the Wonderbolts are called out to stop it.
Soarin is a goofy and fun loving member of the Wonderbolts. As he flies through the blizzard... he ends up with more than a few frozen wings.

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Very intresting concept having Soarin meet an Articuno but the wall of text is an issue. You could also stand to slow down and flesh things out a little. :eeyup:

Still you're off to a good start. :twilightsmile:

And obvious joke is obvious but:

great! But a block of text is bad

Did he sleep on the floor or something because I don't think he even went to his bunk/bed/house or wherever he's supposed to sleep...
He didn't sleep right in the middle of the hallway/office he was in, did he?

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Yes he was so exhausted he just fell asleep on the floor. There was mass chaos after the blizzard. :twilightsheepish:

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Thank you! I will do my best to fix it next time, I think there were some errors when I edited it... :twilightsmile:

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Thank you so much for the compliment! :pinkiehappy:

I will do my best to edit it next time! :fluttershbad: Had some troubles with it..

strangely enough, i didn't realize it was a pokemon crossover. the story was really well written, and i would like to see some more, cousin!:moustache:

I can believe I'm going to say this but...
"ARTICONO! No! It's filthy in zer." *Chuckles* "Birds."

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*slaps articuno in the face* "WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU BIRD!?"

-articuno used blizzard!-
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"ow" :coolphoto:

So Where's next chapter ?

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