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Discord; once the ruler of Equestria. Fair, and Loyal. He had the love of the dear Celestia, and the friendship of kind Luna. What changed? What happened, to make this once loved creature...the most feared in all of Equestria...and hated by those he loves most? Well, Twilight Sparkle will get to the bottom of it; even if Luna has to tell the story herself.
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Well... I could do a great many things, and I shall.
Firstly, congratulations on reaching 11 likes on your story on what I'm pretty sure is your first story. It does say in the author's note on Chapter One that it is your 'second'.
Secondly, I could not find a single grammatical error, but the chapters could have been a little bit longer.
Thirdly, The character aspect for Celestia was so far away as for it to be an OC personality, I'm sure you meant it like that, but it is a bit disconcerting. The rest of them were good, particularly the childish Luna.
And finally. Keep at it! Practice makes perfect, after all.
awesome story i loved it so far can't what to read the rest
Dislestia?
2670365 Yup! I love them as a couple.
2670261 Thank you very much! Next update is in a couple of days.
2669970 Thanks for the Critique. In the next update, I'm gonna fix Celestia's lines and mannerisms, but I did want her to feel detached from the whole situation, since this is a Dislestia story told by Luna, I wanted her to feel sad and still think of what had happened, as if it still was happening to her. And this is in fact my second written fanfic. The first is on FanFiction.net and it's a Halo one, but this is my first MLP one if you wanna count it like that, and a second is gonna be on the way after I wrap this one up And finally, I know the chapters should be longer, but it becomes harder to add to them, so I just add a new one when the subject ends,.
A cute idea! Reading next chapters and liking!
2671144 She should be less "startled" and describe some body language. Describe the scenes- places around them. Don't focus TOO much on dialogue- heh, I feel I don't put enough dialogue because I am a bit of a poet; describing is pretty easy. anyways! The chapters could be beefed up, or combined into one chapter, but otherwise awesome! FAVORITING!
i really like this story hope to read more soon
o m g
i would LOVE THIS to go on :(((
its really good