The long lost princess of the wind

It has been over 2000 years since the long lost princess whirlwind has been seen. Now she wakes up in the Crystal Caves beneath Canterlot with no clue where she is or what she did wrong to end up there. All she wants is to be safe in her sisters arms away from the torture below.

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Kaldanor

Kaldanor #1 · Jun 8th, 2013 · 1 · ·

The enter key is your friend. Space your paragraphs.

Mr Ignorable

Mr Ignorable #2 · Jun 8th, 2013 · 4 · ·

A review by Mr. Ignorable

Celestias P.O.V

HERE WE GO.

The crisp smell of them was making me giddy with delight

Because, you know, Sun Deity orgasms so hard over culinary masterpieces.

Just admiring the art work as I glided down the hallway in an elegant pose.

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in an elegant pose

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Something along the lines of this, I presume?

Princess Whirlwind was an alicorn of average height

Her coat, pure white

OH MY GOD IT'S THE ATTACK OF THE HASBRO COLOR SWAPPERS!

Even if she was the youngest

she was the strongest of us

So author, please explain how your character's NOT a Mary sue?

"Good morning Discord" I said looking at him with utter disgust. Fancy walking up behind some pony obviously wallowing in pain that THEY had created!

Wow, seems like P.C's on her period today. After all, didn't she forgive Discord, even after he pretty much wrecked E.Q's shit?

2000 years ago

EAT SHIT LULU. MY CURSE IS SO BETTER THAN YOURS.

“IM YOUR SISTER!”

*I'm

It was small, but it clearly spelt out something.
I’m back.

I thought the first chapter was entirely in P.C's point of view?

FlufflePuff

FlufflePuff #3 · Jun 9th, 2013 · · 6 ·

2691582 Now before you go and use not so constructive criticism on my story, I suggest you read what your profile pic says and take it into consideration.
thankyou!