So, since nobody liked the revisions to that scene and they were even more vocal about it than they'd been before, that entire scene is now gone. It has been excised and it didn't happen, the chapter now starts with Gilda. This will give me more time to consider how to achieve the same ends by better means without bringing a halt to forward progress.
Thank you all for your patience and your frankly expressed views.
I've taken the critiques from most people who have contributed in giving feedback in how my Tale of Two Sunsets story was set up, and I've finally revised every single chapter with more unique titles, better word choices, and more respectable lengths, without really altering the story that much. Please give it a read if you get the chance, as I plan to add more chapters soon.
I need to finish the chapters I've been working on and start editing the next one to release.
Opens up the first chapter and starts making edits
No, that - that is the wrong chapter. That isn't one of the new chapters, that is the oldest chapter. What are you doing?
Uses available energy making good edits to the older content, and is left unable to work on anything new
...Dammit!
As in many cases in life one must tear down in order to build back up. Such is the case for An End to Ignorance. The prologue and chapter one have both been edited now and are here to stay, chapter 2 is going to take A LOT of work, and I am trying to figure out how to salvage it to some extent and not just delete the thing entirely. I hate to do so, what a waste of 6000+ words. Anyway, what was previously the "interlude" is now its own separate story. What I want to do most of all, and what my
So I have finally begun revisions on the Heart of Stone. It will take some time, considering its a four hundred thousand word story that only makes sense. When I do post them it will be done in blocks. Each Act will be treated as it's own book. Most of what I'm doing is editing, as well as word smithing. Though i will also be trying to strengthening the plot lines that are there, and eliminating ones that never panned out or weaken the story over all.
Dialogue revisions and sentence structure revisions will take place in Wandering Through Realities before Chapter III: "The Aeons Torn" is published in the coming days.
The urge to revise has grown on me such as a strange Kenyan rash would. Now that I have the story successfully submitted, people get to read the Prologue and Chapters I & II to get a feel for the story while the changes take place.
Alrighty, so, I now have a good idea of where I'm going with this universe, and here are the characters, some removed, others edited for the sake of correction. (Please i need a better name for Sapphire Flower, help me out, eh?)
Characters:
Fancy Mark - Earth Pony
Sapphire Flower - Pegasus
Evergreen - Unicorn
Dirt Patch - Earth Pony
Clypeus - Changeling
Vanta - Umbrum
Ardutho - Zebra
Characteristics:
After thinking about it more and reading a comment from Commander Darklight again I decided to not have Twilight's friends go with her instead just having spike with her. Just wanted to let you all know! I think it will be better this way anyhow.
To everyone that is following me because of Helljumpers, due to my own dissatisfaction and Venerable Ro's correct observation that the pacing was way too high in the chapter I added Day 12 and Day 14 to chapter 6, that means There are an additional 1500 words of content now in chapter 6. I'll also notify anyone else in chapter 7 about this addition, it also means I broke 20000 words! 
This is just a quick little notice to anyone who has already read or is planning to read Black Sun Nation. Currently, the only chapter that's out is the first chapter, but after a day or two of reviewing it with multiple (one in particular) peers, I've changed some things. It's not completely different, there are just some key story elements in the text that have been reworked so that they work better.
I finally rewrote the final chapter of "The Magician and the Detective", taking into account Karen Joy Fowler's critique. (I changed the tea references in chapters 8 and 10 to lavender tea, to remove any doubt
Right, so I got some replies on the prior one. And what most people seem to ask for so far, is that I just focus on what I apparently "un-fucked" in the original story. Mainly the 18+ content. (though tbh, I think some people are a bit harsh on it. Yes, most of it was bad, but it wasn't THAT awful. I mean yes, many of them are almost as bad as how K-Kat fucked up Fallout Equestria with the two massive plotholes. But that people seem to rather sweep under the rug, with no intent to even bother
Once again, I modified a couple of words in the last line of The Clarity of Darkness. The difficulty I've had has been riding the fine line between a tragic misinterpretation that I didn't think anypony would make, and total saccharine glurge. I think the change I've made is (finally) an effective compromise.
Hi all! I have some stuff to tell you guys. First up, new chapters on the 'CHS vs CPA vs MHS:Battle of the Bands story' will be put on hold for revising. You can thank DJZapApple for the editing. Next, Chapter 6 on 'All About Moonlight Sparks' will be posted either later or tomorrow. Depends on how busy I would be. And speaking of busy, I'll be in collaboration with the group 'Single Writers' so I'll be extra bit busy, So I guess that's all for now. I'll see you all later!
So, now that things are settling down from the hurricane, I should probably get back to writing Displaced Into Nothing. I'm not expecting to finish Chapter 6 for a while though: I haven't really been thinking about it since last Wednesday, when things started to get scary: when the state governor tells you "Get out now. You will not survive." and the other 4 people in the house insist that there won't even be a hurricane, you don't think about niche My Little Pony fanfiction.
So I spent about 2 & 1/2 hours last night listening to Pontiff Sulyvahn's theme from Dark Souls III and hammering through all the changes that the EQD pre-reader wanted me to make. Most of them are little mechanical and syntax fixes that you probably wouldn't even notice unless you were looking for them, but the big one I worked on was expanding the scope of Starlit's "vision" from about half-way through the chapter. After reading what the pre-reader said about it (that it read like "someone
Chapter 2 has been revised, which means only Chapter 3 and then I'll put up all the revisions at once. I had to change more for this one than for Ch. 1 because there were a few things that I didn't like on a second read through. Mainly, Sweetie Belle's little speech has been changed to be a little more age appropriate for her vocabulary, and Rarity's reaction has been toned down to boot (it did seem a little over the top, after all.)
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