Chapter Revisions Continue · 1:23am Dec 27th, 2023
I finished and published a completely rewritten Chapter 3 of To Bellenast. If you recently read the original version, you have my condolences. It was awful.
I promise the new version is an order of magnitude better. It’s 1/3 the length, has no pointless fight scenes, no plot contrivances, and no unnecessary exposition (there is a teeny tiny bit; I wanted to keep it to the absolute minimum, but these bits are vital).
Furthermore, it now matches the tone and theme of the rest of the story, which is far-removed from the wanton ultraviolence I foolishly wrote in the Big Dumb Fight now shunted into literary oblivion.
If you’ve already read up to the most recent chapter, then please, give 1-3 another shot and drop any feedback you might have. I’d appreciate it.
Chapter 4 is next...
January 10th: I’m about 7K words into the rewrite of 4.
