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Need some feedback on something. · 8:08am Nov 16th, 2015

I'm working on two new second-person stories, with the same timelines (different events, of course) but with intersecting stories. They could be read as standalone stories, or together for a more cohesive story, but, I dunno if people want that. What do you guys think?

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Wow, thanks for the watch! Although I am rather curious how I earned such an honor.:twilightsheepish:

Perhaps you can tell me?:duck:

690565 Ooookay, not promising anything. But I might be writing again. Maybe. Kinda. Sorta. Maaaaaaaybe. Not telling which character this time. Nope, not telling, even a little bit. :ajbemused: :ajsleepy: :ajsmug: :applejackconfused: :applejackunsure: No hints, either. Promise.

Ppppppppffffffffffffffffftttttttt

668277 Maybe the main character can spend his time thinking about his old home, and reasons for moving while they're in the rain. This will give the character A LOT more depth. And you can use this to show why they choose function over fashion. Afterwards when the rain stops and ponies start to come out of their houses to continue about their day, the second person character notices a clothing store (Rarity's) and goes in to look for a scarf to buy for the upcoming winter, this can be where they meet! Also, Rarity would probably be horrified at his dripping wet clothing, which can cause many scenarios where their friendship (and love) begins to blossom.

I've been a loyal reader for your you series.
Hope this helps!

668277 Hello there, haven't seen you in a while! Why not make the gender a decision upon the readers themselves as they read the story? Possibly by never stating the gender of the second person character, and have other main characters refer to them as "Them" or "They" instead of "Him" or "Her"

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