*reads the entire first bit with the Mane Six* Lol. Nice deployment of Handwavium, buddy! :p
Now, everything feels a bit more in character and believable. If I may recommend, you may want to go back and put that in the beginning somewhere. Some people wouldn't read past the OoC bits to get this far. Just a suggestion.
Twilight sighed. “The bad news is that, according to the book and the effects it lists for equine breeds, you're gonna have to cum at least once a day for a month. That's how long it will take for the aphrodisiac to wear off. And like before, you can't self-stimulate. I don't know why, it just makes the lust even worse. Plus, to help ward off the effects, you have to orally consume, at least once a day each, male and female ejaculate.”
I'm not sure why, but that seems like an awfully contrived means to add another to the herd. Given Equestria as context, it is theoretically possible to have such a thing exist, but I can't help but feel that it doesn't mesh well with a clop. Something just doesn't fit well. I can't put my finger on it.
Trixie isn't very aware of national events, is she?
Trixie paid no heed to 'closed' sign on the locked door, bucking it open and pompuously strolling in.
"Twilight Sparkle! The Great and Powerful Trixie demands that you..." She trailed off.
As she took in the features of the lavender unicorn in front of her, she noticed something she has never seen before. Wings! The pony whose library entrance she just decimated and almost challenged to a duel was an alicorn! A legendary race whose power was enough to move around celestial objects like tiny little dolls.
And she just angered one of them.
She fainted.
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"We put up the 'closed' sign and locked the door, right?" Derpy questioned as she lifted her head from Twilight's nether regions.
"This is Trixie we're talking about. She probably does that to every house she visits." Twilight responded, cleaning up the sofa they had just used.
Hah! Sounds like somebody took some of the advice to heart! I liked the additions this chapter. Certainly helped make things a bit more believable. The whole 'one year' thing...yeah that kinda changes a lot. For the better lol.
But DAMN if Zecora's ailment wasn't convenient. And oddly specific...
Still laughing my ass off. The thought of posters for this sort of thing is uproarious. Pinkie/Discord scene was FANTASTIC.
2670794 To be fair, she has been "out of town", of sorts, for the last year. Is it really all that surprising that she wouldn't have received the message, sequestered in the far-eastern mountains as she has been?
Captain Barricade said, the massive, canary-yellow, pink and gray maned pegasus
Something smells of an interdemensional game of chess to me. ... Wait. My apologies: That was Commander Barricade Shy. Never-mind, I'll just be going for now.
It's strange that Twilight claimed in chapter 2 that it was a lifetime of service, only to be corrected in chapter 3. Celestia and Luna ought to have explained that to her before-hand, one would think.
and she shall bring you pain without end if she manages to not get f#%% and @$%^$ with twilights $%#$ and then - 4 hours later- anyway that pleasure without end line immediately reminded me of heavy's taunt where he promises the above
so was he dancing with Matilda? or was he singing "Waltzing Matilda"?
Waltzing Matilda, waltzing Matilda You'll come a-waltzing Matilda, with me And he sang as he watched and waited till his billy boiled: "You'll come a-waltzing Matilda, with me."
“The bad news is that, according to the book and the effects it lists for equine breeds, you're gonna have to cum at least once a day for a month. That's how long it will take for the aphrodisiac to wear off. And like before, you can't self-stimulate. I don't know why, it just makes the lust even worse. Plus, to help ward off the effects, you have to orally consume, at least once a day each, male and female ejaculate.”
Trixie smirked, and unfastened herself from her cart, setting up camp for the evening. “Yes... Our last battle. And this time, there will be no interruptions, no corrupting amulets, no idiot fans bringing in Ursas. It shall be noble combat, unicorn versus unicorn, with the winner admitting once and for all that the other is the greatest.”
Once her bedding was set up, she crawled in, pulling some granola bars and carrots out of her cart and starting to eat. “Only this time,” Trixie said, smirking, “It shall be Trixie who triumphs.”
“That's not important,” Pinkie Pie said. “What is important is the fact that YOU are a suspect in the theft of my delightfully humorous crazy!”
Barricade shook her head. “I'd say I don't think you've lost it, but I don't know if that statement fits here,” she said, her expression a mix of confusion and irritation
I guess Trixie doesn't read the papers.
This has me squirming(a huge feat that only the best can accomplish... and when my bf's not here I get needy... )
2670794 nope and there will probably be some twixe soon
Unicorn vs. unicorn...
Awesome!
not bad soo far.... but could a stallion put in a request?
Someone's stealing my crazy.
ha
*reads the entire first bit with the Mane Six*
Lol. Nice deployment of Handwavium, buddy! :p
Now, everything feels a bit more in character and believable. If I may recommend, you may want to go back and put that in the beginning somewhere. Some people wouldn't read past the OoC bits to get this far. Just a suggestion.
Can't wait for more!
Oh Trixie... yeah this situtation won't end well for you... at least in the way your thinking.
2671025 Was trying more for a saving throw, actually...
twilight will go mad with power,it's only a matter of time.....
Yeeeeah... Trixie was pretty much inevitable.
My guess is that Trixie will faint when she sees Twilight's wings.
I'm not sure why, but that seems like an awfully contrived means to add another to the herd. Given Equestria as context, it is theoretically possible to have such a thing exist, but I can't help but feel that it doesn't mesh well with a clop. Something just doesn't fit well. I can't put my finger on it.
Trixie isn't very aware of national events, is she?
-Stupid Sexy Macintosh
Umm.. Trixie. I know you've been on the road or whatever, but alicorn princess and all that.
Not sure how I feel about Zecora becoming a slave, even if it is temporary. You know, for obvious reasons..
So what I want to happen
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This comic sums it up
“How did you even get here?” Captain Barricade said, the massive, canary-yellow, pink and gray"
fluttershys mom.. from another fic. i think its called "green." or somthing like that :P another awsome read :P
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You cannot resist Trixie, there is only the sexycorn. (Horrible Star Trek joke is horrible.)
2674513 Read the authors other fics Barnicle is Fluttershy's mum in all of them
$10 says that she isn't expecting Twilight to be an Alicorn.
"unicorn versus unicorn, with the winner admitting once and for all"
Why would the winner admit that?
nek minnit, Trixie sees Twilicorn and shits herself
Trixie concentrated on her training, she did not notice the posters, the newspapers and all the hype of the "NEW" Princess twilight.
Awkward moment when Trixie finally notices an alicorn as her rival.
Hah! Sounds like somebody took some of the advice to heart! I liked the additions this chapter. Certainly helped make things a bit more believable. The whole 'one year' thing...yeah that kinda changes a lot. For the better lol.
But DAMN if Zecora's ailment wasn't convenient. And oddly specific...
Still laughing my ass off. The thought of posters for this sort of thing is uproarious. Pinkie/Discord scene was FANTASTIC.
2672323 Yeah...
Trixie you are so Screwed. Literally.
2670794 To be fair, she has been "out of town", of sorts, for the last year. Is it really all that surprising that she wouldn't have received the message, sequestered in the far-eastern mountains as she has been?
Something smells of an interdemensional game of chess to me.
...
Wait. My apologies: That was Commander Barricade Shy. Never-mind, I'll just be going for now.
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why just $10 this is a sure thing.
Turns out there was a study on how much wood a woodchuck can chuck.
The answer? 361.9237001 cubic centimeters of wood per day.
Isn't science great?
It's strange that Twilight claimed in chapter 2 that it was a lifetime of service, only to be corrected in chapter 3. Celestia and Luna ought to have explained that to her before-hand, one would think.
Yeah characters from the tf2 story.
2960541me head hurts
2674513waking nightmares
and she shall bring you pain without end if she manages to not get f#%% and @$%^$ with twilights $%#$ and then - 4 hours later- anyway that pleasure without end line immediately reminded me of heavy's taunt where he promises the above
so was he dancing with Matilda?
or was he singing "Waltzing Matilda"?
Wow. You should weaponize the stuff!
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When you need it, yes, it is.
When you don't… Eenope.
Hmm. Twilight fixing Zecora's mess up is something new.
2672323 No more contrived than what happens in canon, really
Uhhhhh...
Hm...
Want to tell us something Sparklebutt?
OH trixie you moron unicorn to unicorn combat. pick up a news paper you fool
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Very, VERY old reply on this, I know, but she's not just literally screwed, she's royally fucked.
YEEEEEEEAAAAAAA-*shot*
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I suddenly have the urge to look for Twilight X Zecora ship fics
I loved this game when I was a kid!
So, any idea on how Trixie is going to react to see that twilight is no longer a unicorn, but a alicorn, as well the thought of the look on her face?
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Ditto!!!
... um, Trixie... Your info's slightly out of date, I'm afraid... ;]
Didn't see anything else.