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Interesting start, but a little short and vague. I'll track and follow to see where you're going with this.
not bad
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Tell that to the 13 people who disliked it.
2351442 haters are going to hate just dont let that stop you
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It's suppose to be vague, I was trying to take my time on this and think it through. But, now...well...
2351483 Don't get discouraged by the asshats that down vote without commenting. I like the way it's going. The vagueness only makes me want to see more. I will say it was a little short, but you go with what you're comfortable with. Please don't let the haters stop you from writing.
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Thanks, the both of you.
Rough ending there. Man... What an impact to Big Mac. It's sad if you're going to kill her off... I really like her character. Timid and shy, but shows her 'rambunctious' side when she feels comfortable. (at least that's the vibe I am getting off the flashbacks.)
I'm guessing you're going to tell us why she's going to die. (hopefully she doesn't 
I like her). Anyway's sorry about my rambling! 
But I always like when an OC is done correctly.
You also missed a few words here and there.
There's a few more, and some double spaces in places, but nothing horrible. (Don't worry! My writing is not the best either.
)
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Yeah, I know. Don't have a lot of time to write. Life is getting a little hard. I wrote most...all of it on my iPod when I had a free moment. So that's the reason for the mistakes. Sorry about that, and actually I like your comment. You're actually telling me things that I did Wrong and what I'm doing right. I do have a question though, what do you mean doing an OC right?
What I plan is for the next part to be long and detailed. Hopefully I can pull it off.
2378369 Well a lot of writers tend to 'Mary Sue' their OC's. Meaning overpowered god like characters that are pretty perfect in all respects. Your character Black Rose has a bit of everything. A down side to her like the voices in her head putting her down, and some up sides. Having the courage to keep going back to the farm to see Mac. I also like her timidness and shy clumsiness. Like her conversation with Applejack and how she kinda stumbled over her words because she was nervous. It made a really cute scene there.
But then there's her rambunctious side, and that's where the flashbacks come to mind. I could totally see her being a 'screamer' type if you get me.
And like I said in your blog, I would love to use her character in the world I like to write in. She would fit in perfectly!
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Well, I'm not quite sure what I'm going to do with Black Rose. I honestly got her character idea from mixing Fluttershy, the song Black Rose by Trapt, and myself. The whole OC thing, yeah I hate OCs myself, mostly because of the Overpowered thing. I always give my OCs weaknesses, the more powerful they are, the more ridiculous there weakness is. I even did it for my actual OC, that is me. Which is in my other stories, his name is mine and everything.
I know exactly what you mean
. That's why the Flashbacks are there, it's suppose to be a joke about the stereotype about Big Mac. I thought it was funny, so I rolled with it. Can you explain why she would fit in your world. You got me interested lol.
This was an interesting fic. I don't have much to add to what already have been said here though. (That, and that it's 2:45 AM here atm, and whatever I say will end up beeing rambling)
Anyhow, lets try;
)
Lets first say that Black Rose seems to be an interesting character, and, depending on how you want to continue this fic, you could explore her character a bit more. I like some information on the OCs, and with her background, and her current problems, she seems like an interesting character to read about. (And ... now I feel kind of bad for writing that, poor Black Rose
Your Mac' also seems wellwritten.
) and still pretty thoughtful character.
I've got to admit, I've not read that many fics where Mac is a main character, and have therefor not seen different characterizations of him. That said, I like how you are interpreting him, as a calm (mostly
This is tagged as tragedy, hm, I wonder where you'll take this.
Have a like and a fav!
Thanks for writing this and putting it up for everyone to enjoy!
And thanks Timeless Equine for linking to AshuraZXexianGlitch in your last chapter, heh
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Well first off, thanks for commenting and liking my story. I really appreciate it. I have big plans for Black Rose, not just the story but her character too. Honestly, I thought I was doing Big Mac wrong. When I first posted this I was excited until I saw all the dislikes, made me ill
. If it wasn't for 2343922 2351330 I probably would have junked this story. It's just discouraging ya know. Oh look who's rambaling now... I'll keep this short, I'm trying to improve on my writing and trying to make interesting stories for everyone. It's really all I want 
. Thanks again 
.
2398337 Yeah, I understand you, still, those dislikes are everything but deserved, sigh. People did even dislike the positive comments, without replying to anything.
That ... kind of makes me wonder where they came from. I've seen groups of people grouping up against, say, My Little Dashie spinoffs. With hateful comments and dislikes. But here? No idea, again, this fic doesn't deserve those dislikes.
Oh well, good luck with continuing this, or writing something else, or something completely unrelated to fiction, depending on what you do next, heh.
Ok .. this escalated, whoa. That's dark (.. and that's not a bad thing ^^)
Reading this makes me feel bad for Rose, poor her, I wonder in which direction you'll take this, hm
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Keep reading and you'll find out, cause to be honest. I don't have any idea, just kind of winging it right now haha.
This story..i couldn't tell exactly why but...I LOVE IT.i really do.
Hoping than this hiatus status is only temporary.