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AshuraZXexianGlitch


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This story is a sequel to Life and Future


Everyone has heard of me, I mean come on who hasn't heard of the fastest flyer in all of Equestria. But no one has heard a story I would rather not tell, but I'm going to tell it anyway. This story haunts me to no end, it just personal is why it haunts me. To you it might not seem hard, but I loved my dad, and this makes it even harder to begin. I guess it all started with Twilight Sparkle, one of my best-est friends I could ever have.

(This takes place after the events of Twilight's Life and Future.)

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 93 )

A few mistakes here and there but other than that awesome :rainbowkiss::rainbowdetermined2::yay:

Comment posted by Rainbow87dash deleted Feb 13th, 2013
Comment posted by Rainbow87dash deleted Feb 13th, 2013

2118148 Thank you for the picture, great picture. Couldn't find the one with the artist's name.

I like it but you spelled rarity wrong:rainbowdetermined2::yay::facehoof:

Comment posted by StormyStrife deleted Feb 15th, 2013

I love the whole orphanage idea! :twilightsmile:

Comment posted by AshuraZXexianGlitch deleted Feb 15th, 2013

2118763 I did? Sorry about that, I type fast so i miss some things. Sorry about that. :twilightsheepish:

Not sure why anyone would dislike this. I mean, yeah you have a few errors but so do I on some of my stories. I hate it when people dislike something though and don't say why. I am going to Like this for the story and because you have something amazing here.
The path has been set, now lets see where it leads.:rainbowdetermined2:

Comment posted by Mr Pones deleted Feb 14th, 2013

Definitely needs an editor, but the premise is good and interesting

We can talk anytime, I'll be available to talk at anytime."

You repeated yourself
"We can talk anytime you want." would sound better :twilightsmile:

Think about getting an Editor

Yes I have actually tried to get an editor, but I have always come up short. I had to be my own editor majority of my writing. It's a little difficult to find all my mistakes when you only have one view in the matter. I do appreciate it when people point out my mistakes in a constructive way cause it helps greatly. Most of my mistakes deals with me typing to fast and I over look some things. I do try my best to get every mistake, but as everyone can see I miss some. Any help would be greatly appreciated.

Good work. There's a few problems but I think the story is more important than the spelling. :moustache:

How long till what happens??
Does Blitz die?

I think you must be talking about Alicorn Twilight. Or something have to do with them all becoming immortal or ... Wow, I guess I shall just have to wait and see.:rainbowdetermined2:

I'm guessing along similar lines to the coronation
I won't lie, before that first (probably small in future comparison) grand reveal worried me for a moment; unusually when these characters approach Celestia like so and she says how ashamed she is of what she's done, it's usually followed by: "I'm your real mother". I rarely see that write well, and the one that do update at the speed of a glacier or stopped entirely

Great story. May want to fix a few errors though. "8 hated him ever since he left" I think you meant 'I'. Don't worry I have done the same thing before. The 8 is right above the I and when you are a fast typer these things happen. You may not notice this but I have already fixed this comment twice already.:rainbowlaugh: Any ways I like your story so far and if you have time, i just released a One-shot adventure story that i believe is my best one yet. Check out The Road to Dawn if you get the chance.:rainbowdetermined2:

I started working on the meat.

Meat? :rainbowhuh:

2131505 Son of a bitch...herbivores, that's right:facehoof:. Dammit, I was thinking human hahaha....gotta fix that::twilightblush::twilightsheepish:

I like it a lot I can't what till the next chapter:twilightsmile:

It is alright to take a hiatus. I am having the same issue with my story so i know how you feel. I hope you eventually find the motivation to write more. You have something really awsome in the works and I can't wait to see where it goes.:rainbowdetermined2:

2137948 It's just that I've been writing a lot, I could continue easily. I forget when I posted this but it wasn't long ago. I have no drive to do so, no motivation at the moment. I think all the views and likes and comments got me to where I am now. I thank everyone who has been enjoying my story, and the two who disliked it, just what ever lol, no big right.

Great Story! Can't wait for more :pinkiehappy:!

most people don't have the guts to put themselves in a story so i say good job and your OC sounds Awsome.:rainbowdetermined2:
(although poeple have but OCs in there stories no one has put themselves trully in it. My OC has a story but it is not trully my story so much as it is his.)

2144272 My OC, is me truefully. This actually takes place a little after my other story dealing with Twilight with me telling the story. Twilight's life and future, I haven't finished it mostly because I ran short with where I wanted to go. Plus a lack of motivation.

2144574 Motivation seems to be key when writing stories it seems.

2144957 I'm in the military man, motivation is important to me. Besides without motivation everything seems bleek and bland. It's like painting, you have to have patios and love for your work.

2145008 Wow thats awsome. What I just meant was that me and alot of the people I know on here are having huge motivational issues. Not sure if it has to do with the begining of the year or just some weird phase or what but it seems to be happening to alot of people. I wish I could get the motivation I need and for the sake of everyone else. Writing stpries is what I love to do and to not have the motivation is really getting me down. Guess I need a little help from Pinkie Pie or something. But reading and writing is an Art so the connection isn't as suprising but still interesting to hear.

2145033 Everyone I know calls me an artist so that's why I say shit like that. Now I'm gonna have to make a video to get people motivated, cause what really motivates me is seeing others motivated, and comments and likes and views on my stories. I'm actually enjoying talking to you, it keeps me coming back here lol. So your motivating me man.:pinkiehappy::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::pinkiehappy:

wow glad to hear. I would try to keep this converation going but it is now 1:00 and I should really consider going to bed. But any ways glad I could be of some help and I look forward to your next chapter and future stories. Also you seem to have motivated me just a bit as well, so thanks.:rainbowdetermined2:

2145178 Your an hour ahead of me. Yeah it's getting late. I'm always eger to help, if ya need any help I'm always here to lend a helpful hoof /) lol. And I'm always greatful for some help.:pinkiehappy:

Things are getting interesting:rainbowdetermined2:

2146500 Thank you very much. :twilightsmile:

2146376 I know isn't it exciting :pinkiehappy:! I just couldn't sleep lat night because this was floating in my head. Ugh this story won't let me sleep:facehoof:.

2126161 Was that what you were expecting or did I surprise ya?

A few spelling errors like ranbiw dash but other than that great story so far:pinkiehappy:

This is really smart yet at the same time confusing. Why can't he destroy you? With you out of the way he could take over the story and write about him winning this instead. Since you seem to be outside of reality he doesn't have to worry about no longer existing if he gets rid of you. Also, man what a potty brain.:rainbowlaugh:

2157973 Whats confusing? The potty mouth, yeah I get like that sometimes. You can even ask my friends. He can't write anything that blocks Twilight and Rainbow Dash directly, he can't control them. Mostly because he believes he isn't in a story. It is confusing, only because I don't explain much hahaha.

Comment posted by ShadowBrony deleted Feb 22nd, 2013

2158793 I may be the author but I'm not the one writing the story.

2159283 Hahahahaha, don't think about it to much. Let me put it like this, I'm not the one telling the story.

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