Incendium

Flyer

Flyer #1 · Mar 24th, 2013 · · ·

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A story we can all relate to. Keep it coming!

Giant-Man

Giant-Man #2 · Mar 24th, 2013 · · ·

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Finn iz dragon!

ThemBananas

ThemBananas #3 · Mar 24th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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The unicorn in question
The lavender unicorn

She. Just "she" will do nicely.

Twilight said<,> ~~a bit panicky~~, panicking.

Remember that prose has flow.

She never did liked being late for things<.> However today she had overslept <,> and that threw her whole entire schedule ~~for the day~~off track.

The baby dragon moaned<,> not wanting to get up. <New Line> "Ugh, late for what, exactly...?" Spike mumbled before he laid his head back on his pillow<.> He was trying to get into the comfort of his sweet dream of eating countless gemstones<,> again.

~~The lavender unicorn~~ She dropped her panicky attitude and looked at the sleeping baby dragon ~~with a~~ smugly ~~on her face~~. <New Line> "Oh, Spike, did you forget already?" Twilight said, going down the stairs to the bottom level of the library.<New Line> “I guess I’ll just go to Rarity’s boutique party by myself then.”

New speaker/idea(s) get a new paragraph. You aren't publishing this on paper. At least I hope not yet...

The reason for new lines in the latter is because of the action tag and appended declaration.

Spike’s eyes immediately snapped open at the mention of his crush. <New Line> "N-uh! Rarity!" Spike shouted, getting out of bed. ~~Spike~~He ran full speed to catch up to Twilight<,> who had by now begun exiting ~~her~~ the library. <New Line>“I’m coming!” He said<,> ignoring his temptation to sleep again.

“Heh heh. Gets him every time.” Twilight chuckled. <New Line>Of course she often lied ~~to him~~ and used Rarity as a way to get Spike up ~~whenever he didn't feel like it~~.<New Line> Although this time was the truth as Rarity was holding her annual boutique party and naturally everypony was invited to it.

This goes on for the rest of the paper!