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Lady the Rainicorn


Im a Reader not a Writer!........If you have any pony related please notify me.

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(A little request story I did. It's not to be taken seriously or anything, I'm just doing this to test out my writing skills.)

Night Shade is a pegasus pony who want's nothing more ,but to put Rainbow Dash in her place.

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(A little request story I did. It's not to be taken seriously or anything, I'm just doing this to test out my writing skills.)

Well... you didn't do average. Just saying, since I guess, the reason you posted this is that because you want someone to tell you your mistakes.

Only one speaker per paragraph; a basic rule that every new writers keep missing.

The self-insert, which focuses onto Night Shade. Everyone knows that Lightning Dust is the only match for Rainbow Dash.

The OOC character, which means Celestia is out of character, since she's not a tyrant, and wouldn't possibly give such punishment.

Well, that's all what I want to point out.

2656535 I would consider it a draw, but seeing Rainbow Dash could do a sonic rainboom, you're right. Rainbow Dash would win.

2656704 If it's a race. But you're forgetting about farm pone. :ajsmug:

2656771 What I meant was that nopony could beat RD in a race. But when it comes to other activities, she's sometimes a sucker to AJ.

Remember when AJ and RD had a competition?

2656785 Farm pone, and rainbow pone are best athletic pones.

2656816 As long as I get to hug Dashie. :rainbowderp:

2656832 You thought I was gonna confess without something in return? Well think again. Now hand over the hug, Skittle pone.

2656875 How dare you puke because of my scent, Skittle pone!?

>sighed in relief
>lost wings for a year
:derpyderp1:

Also, that escalated quickly.

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Rainbow Dash's strength is in flying.

Applejack's strength is in non-flying physical activity.

Rainbow Dash is a cheater.

Applejack is a fair player.

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After Rainbow Dash cheated multiple times, Applejack couldn't take it anymore, even she had her limits.

Rainbow Dash just didn't want to lose.

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