Shining Armor finds Twilight's secret diary and he doesn't read it... for about 5 seconds.
Page generated in 0.117 seconds
Total duration
648 users online
1,429,704 hits today, 2,707,512 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Posted!
2761541
I always love it when you put out a new chapter! Oh, this is gonna be good based on that pic! I absolutely love it when there's a lot of juices!
2761541
Something feels a bit weird:
but then we got this
So shouldn´t Shiny and Twily have been disqualified for this?
Anyway i loved loved loved this chapter!
It was a tease from beginning to end and the Twi and Shining scenes were awesome awesome and awesome! I hope we´ll get more like that!
But damn, either Twi is STILL researching her bro´s incest love for her, cause that banana sucking(!!!)/going into bed with him/etc, or she´s oblivious to an amount where i already thought she hasn´t noticed that his horn was in her vagina.
Shiny now got plently of images/feels/etc. he can use for masturabtions whenever his wife takes him to another book-club meeting.
That has got to be the most absurd thing ever. 1st place blue ribbon, 2nd place 50,000 bits.
Question! The teaser for Spring 2014...
A joke or real? Please say a joke and sooner... I hope.
~Skeeter The Lurker
" 'I will destroy you and steal your fiance!' Booty booty booty booty rockin' everywhere!"
Well thanks for finally getting us off with Luna and Shining, even if it was a dream fantasy. ;)
But DUDE! Editing is or should be part of the writing process! I appreciate having a new chapter to read just like everybrony else -- Thank you! -- but seriously, this is FULL of serious errors right from the start. Publish late if you need to edit first.
"Write drunk, EDIT sober." You're a writer. EDIT, please.*
*Written under the influence of beer. Please forgive my apparent hypocrisy.
*******
Okay, I wrote the above at the beginning where your editing is at it's worst. This chapter was a lot of fun -- seriously, I laughed a lot -- and I really enjoyed this one. You are doing a marvelous job of maintaining the teasing playfulness (of your readers) between Twilight and Shining. I forgive you for the editing errors, which really tailed off as the chapter progressed, anyway.
Excellent job!
that friendship is witchcraft reference :3
2761541
If this was written in a drunken haze, you should do it more often!
Yesssssss.......
I'll do a list of the errors I can find again:
- "And if you break her heart- I will break you neck. Is that clear?" should be your
- "He had share a bed enough times with Cadence before that he thought nothing of it." should be shared
- "But it remained hidden. for now." Should probably be a capital F, or a comma.
- "A particular was the sheets were pulled, any errant purple hairs." not sure what this should be. It's possible that this is correct and I just don't understand it.
Anyway, good job once again. This is probably my favourite ongoing fic on this site (and that's saying a lot). I want to see where this goes.
Why do i get the feeling twi planned at least a bit of it or took a chance when she saw one?^^
Okay, aside from the obvious editing errors, why am I still showing this story as having an unread chapter available to read? Are you marking a new unpublished chapter or something? Or is this just a system bug? Just asking, because your story already shows an unread chapter in my new chapter notifications even though I've clearly already read everything. Just curious, no criticism intended....
I wonder how this'll all play out because she got her memories erased right?
2762201
This has happened to me as well, and on another story too. Not sure what's going on.
2762451 Yep, I've heard of it before, but this is the first time I've seen it happen to me...
2761634 They weren't using magic to directly affect the game, like levitating the ball itself.
2761714 Real. I don't joke about things like that.
2761852 I do edit as I go. But I was already running three hours late today, and I really wanted to get it posted by noon EST. (As I try to do every week BTW) And I get a little antsy whenever I'm tardy!
2761878 Always. I do have a kegerator right next to my desk after all.
2762050 Thank you for the help. It's always appreciated.
2762354 I don't know.
2761634
Technically, the magic was only in use to get Twilight up on his head, and between rounds. I could see Flim&Flam complaining about it, but that Twi&Shining would get through on a technicality since their magic wasn't in use during the actual game.
The only real complaint I have about this is that Celestia seems remarkably defensive all around. With all the dull political nonsense she has to deal with, not to mention Twilight, I'd think she'd be on top of the world listening to her sister recounting a fun night out on the town (especially since my headcanon is that Celestia deliberately arranged for Nightmare Night to become a holiday of treats and spooky entertainment in order to give the whole Nightmare moon a bit of fanciful whitewashing)
That said, when Twilight becomes an Alicorn, I can't help but see Celestia taking Shining aside;
"Is there some sort of Master Plan I should know about where you monopolize my entire Bucking SPECIES?"
"Technically it's not your entire species unless I got you as well."
"Don't push your luck."
"Yes, your Majesty. Sorry, your Majesty."
"You'll be lucky to last ten seconds when I take you."
"Yes, your Ma- Wha? WHEN?"
Achievement Unlocked: Alicornopoly!
2762842 Your idea intrigues me.
I may have to steal it.
2762712 Thank you for your oh so confident answer.
Don't worry just pokin fun
2762842
Hey, three in four isn't bad.
Well, should I say, one in three of four HURR HURR HURR.
This chapter was so good I wrote you a limerick!
There was a young stallion with urges
And it wasn't his sword's sheath getting pleasurable surges
But it's for his dear sister
and that damned game of Twister
that triggered his subconscious scourges!
You magnificent tease... How long are you going to make us wait for the payoff?
2764339 Limericks are the highest form of flattery I could ever hope to receive.
I'm printing that out and putting it on my fridge. srsly
2764377
lol. No, not really. The payoff is coming.
i called it in the previous chapter and i will call it again in this one, my bits go toward Discord spell erasing the spell of Celestia and returning all of Twilight memories and feelings for his brother
i mean
that can´t be a dream, after all Twilight was in the bedroom, she got to the bathroom afterwards to wash most presumably her hoofs after those gentle tugs, and she even wanted to return to bed but decided not to because she remembered that Shinning awakes just before dawn, since that knowledge came from her feelings about him and the study she did when she was a filly, but she wasn't counting the possibility of Shinning awaking sooner because of the rubbing, so yeah i´m calling it again, Discord did it when he discorded Twilight
my question is who will break first, will Twilight come out to Shinning? will Shinning figure it out? Twilight is gonna make a mistake and awake Shinning in one of his rubbing nights?
and this chapter was great loved it
2764871 BrackMadar, wat r u doing? BrackMadar! STAP!
i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/445/217/f05.gif
my face when
2764904 sorry my imagination runs wild when i read a great story that envelops me with the plot, i should keep those thoughts to myself, it won´t happen again unless you want me to
i hope this whole thing doesn't hurt the chances for that chapter of Shinning, Luna and possibly Twilight being bedded by Cadance, yeah you did that to me
by the way, i could easily edit the whole comment just say the word
P.S. i´m curious, did you make the gif or you conveniently had it stored in your archives?
2764871 It would be even better if she got back the urges and feelings but not the memories to explain why she does. It's, in all seriousness, the best set up for the massive cluster-fuck that was the Canterlot Wedding and Twilight's, err, heated actions during said.
man way to turn celestia into a total bitch in this story.....
*two weeks later*
hah! hi killed a pumpkhin!
lol.....
some great eventful stuff there at those games lol.....
also i want the source of that pic in here.....
Ohh Twilight and shining at the games was sexy! I really like the realistic names for the genitals, it seems less dirty and more... normal. And I love the story as well, Luna is such a joy.
OH! I LOVE IT!!!! By the way, Shakespearicles, did you know your stories go great with a nice, small glass of scotch and lube?
2767392 It is intentional for character arc/redemption later.
2769163 ..... yes
2769592
Heat of the moment due to recent climax, I'm sorry for sounding so awkward.
2769592 oh , well i still don't think it's acceptable :l .....
2769607 what do you mean by climax? /:|
2770531
Hmmm, I don't know... Maybe this'd help you out?
2770618
denver.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw1401_Pinkie_Pie_the_more_you_know.jpg
y r u applying logic to my clopfic? STAP!
I think we can all agree that Twister is as close fucking was you can get without actually doing it. And that's why we love it.
Oh the awkwardness of two sexually aware siblings.....
I think this is my favorite chapter. For several reasons. I love this story, most excellent.
Now my favorite chapter! I love how Twilight was trying to get the engineer to switch out a steam locomotive for a-shudder-diesel. LONG LIVE STEAM!!!
2761541 I NEED SLEEP, STOP WRITING
Oh Twister.
You know what... YOU KNOW WHAT...
I'm convinced. You are god... of this domain.
I want to give a like for each chapter and favourite this chapter in particular.
awesomecommentphotos.files.wordpress.com/2013/07/996875_10151576981093301_1061407629_n.jpg
static4.fjcdn.com/thumbnails/comments/give+this+man+a++++medal+_27654b594e95a74bca4f65f78b5f3db6.jpg
So much for being professional.
"Art thou accusing us of hijacking thine dreams for our own ends?"
Hijacking.... that seems so off-putting from the rest of the sentence.
Good Lord, this was awkward to read. And I'm using campus Internet!
>His eyes followed it's path into the mountain tunnel
*its
>would be this years winners and receive a blue ribbon
*year's
>separated my the mere width of
*by
>his yet-hidden semi in it's sheath
*its
Kerchief would work in this instance
Just Kerchief would work here
You know...I would have LOVED to see this scene go down. Celestia swoops down on Pip's house in Ponyville and demands to see him in order to give him the warning she gave Shining about romancing her sister...and then she finds out Pip's a little foal.
Awkwardness intensifies.
Okay, assuming it didn't happen at some point earlier, that bead sharing scene should have been enough to restore Twilight's memories that she had
erasedsuppressed. Baring that, the horn thing would definitely do the trick. So, there's that.Still waiting for Shining Armor Vs. Smaug the Dragon...