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Right after the Cupcakes massacre, Pinkamena Diane Pie serial killer and psycho is pregnant with a little filly. After deciding to do the right thing, Pinkamena gives her daughter up for adoption and admits to murder, sent to the Canterlot maximum security prison.
Nineteen years later we meet with Light, a smart fun mare who has never found her meaning in life. What will happen when she learns she is adopted and that she has to save Equestria from a notted serial killer using her mother's MO? With Palette, Network, Andromeda, Sapphire and Heart Felt she will live an epic adventure.

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Comments ( 52 )

dude... you have catched me with this plot... keep it up :pinkiecrazy: :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

I'm hooked! MOAR!

It's Scootaloo, isn't it?

Great plot, also... Haha! i have evened the likes/dislikes! Suck on that, haters!
Already i love this story. MOAR!

This is great! Love this story! It's fantastic
:pinkiehappy:

I really like this idea of building off the 'Cupcakes' universe. The idea of the dynamic between the kind and innocent Light and her psycopathic mother is intriguing. Please do continue with this story. I eagerly await the next update.

Complete speculation here, but I get the feeling that this pony who is copying Pinkamena's MO isn't doing so for fun. The fact they took the time to do so must mean they want attention from the Royal Guard and the fact they are using her method means they must admire her. If the killer were smart, s/he might know that the Guard will turn to Pinkamena for help, taking her out of the secure cell she was in... this coupled with a few other details made my brain churn out an interesting idea.
I'm going play my ace of spades here and put foreword my theory that the identity of the killer is- [REDACTED]

Of course I could be completely wrong and overanalyzing, but it's always fun to wonder.

Keep going, this story is original and I'm defiantly hooked!

Hooray, another chapter! A few nitpicks about spelling (missing off letters from words, probably from typing quickly) Also, whenever you referred to Palette and Network you said "brothers". That gave off the impression that Palette was male, when she's actually female. Try using the word 'siblings' instead, it's the gender-neutral equivalent of brothers or sisters. For example "The siblings disagreed about everything, even videogame consoles." Other than that, great work and i look forward to the next chapter. :pinkiehappy:

It has started!

That authors note was hilarious. That aside, i have no nitpicks at all for this chapter, which is BRILLIANT by the way. I love this story! Sorry if i seemed a bit critical in my other comments, i don't think i stressed enough how much i enjoyed those chapters despite the few nitpicks i had. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Zombificus

Hey no prob! I really could use comments and tips on writing and you helped! I kind of would like to know your opinions on the characters. Thanks btw! :pinkiesmile:

Definitely something to keep an eye on...

A few spelling errors, also you kept putting "where" in place of "were" Might want to reread chapters to check for stuff like that? This story is starting to get really interesting, and it's one of the most compelling stories i've read so far. Just work on that spelling and grammar and it'll be perfect.

I still think that the new killer is Scootaloo. She idolized Pinkamena. Also, I can't wait to see what happens

2229765 Scootaloo Idolizes Rainbow Dash who Pinkamena killed in Cupcakes. I doubt theres any respect there

2232645 True, but remember: this is not the same dimension as the Cupcakes story. Pinkie didn't leave a trace of her murder of Dashie. And the first Pinkamena tumblrs that spawned from Cupcakes had Scootaloo as Pinkamena's assistant, in which Scootaloo idolized Pinkamena:twilightsmile:

The hunt is on. That chapter was pretty emotional, almost had me crying manly tears. Not quite though, no tears were shed this time around. Spelling could use a little work, but you must get tired of me saying that, so i'll probably stop mentioning that next time i comment.

Good work on the chapter, i'm interested to see what happens next... by the way, do you plan on getting the killer involved personally with one of the main characters? I mean, as in will they take one of them as their next victim? That would be an interesting twist if you did that, i think you could pull it off quite well. Also i get the feeling the killer is going to strike again sometime soon. But that's just me.:derpytongue2:

Very nice, very nice. Please continue. :pinkiesmile:

I really like it! Please continue :rainbowkiss:

Light of my life has returned!
BASK IN ITS GLORY! :pinkiehappy:

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:) Don't worry, there's more to come. I'm also planning on adding another character soon. Any ideas?

2462066 Hmm. I'm not sure. What sort of character would this be?

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anypony, even a made up one if you like. BTW what did you think of the chapter? the next one has to be my master piece for this fic.
:raritywink:

DON'T
EAT
THE
CUPCAKES!

holy cupcakes, This is awesome! the way you portray this is amazing!

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Thanks! More coming tomorrow!

2473512 I really mean it, Cupcakes was hte reason I became brony. My sister made me read it about 2 years ago, and I was hooked!

This is the best chapter yet!:pinkiehappy:

I absolutely love this story, I shall continue to keep an excited eye on it!:pinkiehappy:

Sweet Celestia, that cliffhanger!

Damn it, now i'm going to be panicking about what happens next.

:pinkiecrazy:

Wow... amazing... I am scared. Also, it seems you are using different words to describe the word light as chapters. Nice

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And this is just the beginning. Its quite hard to think of synonyms for light, trust me.
:twilightangry2:
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Oh dude, yo have no idea what I have planned...
:pinkiecrazy:

Not another cliffhanger! You're gonna give me a nervous breakdown!

In all seriousness, i'm really excited about this story and it's so good so far. I have no idea what you have planned, no, BUT i'm sure i'm going to love every second of it! :pinkiehappy:

2503670 Light synonyms? Glint, glimmer, sparkle, ember, flicker, bright, radiant, flash.

Hope those are some use to you.

2503670 Whatever you do, the last chapter has to be Light.
I can just smell a big fight between the new killer and Pinkamena. I can smell it!

Oh, this is getting REALLY good. But who IS this stallion? I do love a good mystery. I really like the lines you gave him and Pinkamena in this chapter.

"Oh no, you don't understand. I am going to kill you."

and

"you've gotta love reencounters."

those are some really good lines.

Oh , and that Rainbow Factory thing sounds good, too, if you do it as well as you've done this one, i'm all for it. :pinkiehappy:

So, it is a stallion and a pegasus? hmmmmm, this is interesting.... continue

no.... I know who it is! It is the Discorded version of Doctor Whooves, isn't it?

Having trawled through the MLP wiki's list of ponies, my best guess would be Pound Cake as the Canterlot Killer. That was an excellent chapter, though i felt it was all over a little bit too soon. But i can live with that. Good job on the story in general, especially the last few chapters. :pinkiehappy:

This is quite weird pinkamena has gone from caring to insane
Maybe it's the 18 years in the but house

Are you planning on doing any more work with the stories you've opened up? I'd like to learn more about Light and Pinkie's relationship.

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I'm thinking of writing a sequel more on Pinkamena's point of view about what happens next. I was thinking about it while writing the final chapter and I'm pretty sure I'll go on with it, plus I have this idea of writing a story following the Rainbow Factory and mixing it a bit with cupcakes as I mentioned previously with Palette as the main character, what do you think?

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I'm sure that had something to do with it, that and the fact that she's insane.

This is, as far as I know, very original

Hmmm so there is a pinkenama copycat on the loose then? This will be interesting.:pinkiecrazy:

I am calling pinkenama saving light

Crap, Pound Cake would make sense, considering that he would, in fact look up do his dearest Pinkie Pie, but it is quite distressing she raised such a rude boy.:ajsleepy:

Nice...just nice!

I have read both stories but I just have to say something.There are lots of errors and Light's age keeps skipping through 17, 18 and 19.
If Pinkamena is 27 and Light is 17, 18 or 19 then that means Pinkamena gave birth to Light around the age of 9. It just doesn't make any sense, and shoudln't the filly look different that her mother? Because at the moment she's the exact same as Pinkamena. No looks of her parent's ancestors or her father? Anyway, I really like this story and I hope there's more of the sequel to come.

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