A mysterious new force has appeared in Equastria, while Princess Luna is starting to have terrible hallucinations of a certain pony very familiar to her.
Zecora feels a mysterious and dark presence arriving in equestria, but finds herself struggling to fight it, and finds herself in a battle she can't win.
The changeling queen finds herself having to become a hero to her people as a force not unlike her own starts threatening her subjects.
What is this mysterious force, and what does it have to do to these three ponies who have nothing in common?
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Chapters (4)
Lemme guess: ANOTHER "Nightmare Moon portrayed as an evil bitch-pony" story.....
2152453 Actually, well, I dont want to spoil anything, she is going to be portrayed as evil, but its more as a struggle between the good side and the bad side of person, or, uh pony. Trust me, nightmare moon is not the bad guy. Read it.
Also, As always, I want feedback. I will edit the story is you have any suggestions. I want this to be the best It can be.
2152453 If you had read it, I will enjoy your feedback. As I said before, I want suggestions. I would love your critical feedback, good or bad. I will change the story to fix any mistakes. I believe getting feedback, negative or positive, is one of the most important parts of being good at anything
Well this seems interesting. The story idea seems good. So for now the only thing I can suggest is putting more spaces in between paragraphs and people talking. I mean how it is now isn't to bad but to my eyes it seems like a giant wall of text. Which caused my eyes to try and wander through it. Putting an extra space between the paragraphs should help with that.
2154830 Thanks for the feedback. It will be done instantly
That taxidermist scene was actually pretty horrific, keep up the good work.
2177474 Thanks, that was what i was going for.
I'm back. And I am going to write the next chapter soon.
It's a short chapter, and I think the pacing is a little off, but it's there to explain what happened to zecora. Also, I think it is the darkest chapter yet.
Be warned.
Also, please, give me your feedback as always.
2152453 I actually have a plan for Nightmare Moon besides the whole evil side thing. I'll be giving my own views on Nightmare Moons Motivation in a few chapters. I don't want to spoil anything, so I won't say any more.
Kind of wished to know what happened next honestly.
Sucks that this story didn't get to continue.