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Nova Force


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Fluttershy and Braeburn have fallen for each other, but the distance between Ponyville and Appleloosa puts a strain on their relationship. Discover how they try to make their long distance relationship work in this clean Appleloosan love story!

Chapters (5)
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Fluttershy x Braeburn? My god, what will they think of next, Trixie x Granny Smith? :rainbowlaugh:

Really? Just... really? This is stretching logic a bit.

2104086 Dude, I didn't mean harass the guy. He can write whatever he wants. I'm sorry, Nova, he's with me.

2104111 Maybe I came off harsh. Time to actually knuckle down and give a well thought out review... after food.

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Trixie and Fancy Pants would be more likely, although Trixie x both of Pinkie's sisters could work too. Or maybe a (somewhat younger) Granny Smith x a (also somewhat younger) Mayor Mare? I'd be partial to a nice Gilda x Blueblood, myself.

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Hey, I'm just saying, it always gives me a good laugh to see what kinds of crazy pairings people will think up.

And then they had sex.

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Honestly? The less well known a ship is, the more interesting I tend to find it. AppleDash and Twixie have their points, but they're both stories I've read (many) times before. I'd rather hear about how Dash and Cheerilee bond romantically over a pile of flight GED practice tests than yet another "Applejack and Rarity are opposites and they're in love."

Hooray for the new chapter! :rainbowkiss:

i really like this so far :twilightsmile: i cant wait to read the next chapter :ajsmug:

hmm interesting i liked the campfire conversation between BB and AJ :rainbowlaugh: though i am quite skeptical about Fluttershy's decision to go with him. But its exciting and i really cant wait till the next chapter:twilightsmile: keep it up :pinkiehappy:
(really trying not to be that guy but 1st :))

2211456 Thanks for reading! Who know what's going to go down in Appleloosa? Oh, wait, I do :derpyderp1::heart::derpyderp2:

Here's my thoughts on this so far. Fluttershy shouldn't be having crushy thoughts so soon, because it makes it less and interesting and it's quite cliche. And Braeburn shouldn't be calling her cute and referring to her as "darlin'" this early on either. And, the characterization in general is somewhat dry.

I thought the last two chapters had some good content, but the relationship overall seems way too rushed. And Fluttershy didn't even bother to tell her friends or her animals when she left with Braeburn, which is completely unlike her. Overall, the story had a few good parts, but it had a lot wrong with it.

5/10 is the score I give. I don't mean to be rude, but I just wanted to give input.

Oh wait, whoops, one last chapter.

I'm not sure if this is the end of the story or not, but my opinion that the relationship is too rushed still stands. And I'm kind of afraid were this is going if it isn't over. And aren't Fluttershy's friends and animals worried about her???

2273026 Thank you so much for taking the time for reading my story. Your thoughtful comments have helped me a lot. Yes, Fluttershy abandoning her animals will be addressed in the next chapter. For now, though, I need to think long and hard about how I want to proceed with this story, if at all.


I'm actually working on another project, and I really hope to have your readership again. :twilightsmile:

Hmmm just this here that threw me off a bit

“Oh my goodness, I’ve done anything like this before!” Fluttershy squeaked.

i think you forgot a word here
but other than that i think it was pretty good now the real question is will this story continue or end right there?

2285748 Yikes! :rainbowderp: Thanks for catching that typo. :facehoof: Yes, I will finish the story. There are going to be five more chapters. We're on hiatus because I'm working on something else that I'm very excited to share. :rainbowdetermined2: For now this one will take a backseat, but I never leave my work unfinished. :raritywink:

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Well then i cant wait to see what you have instore for this relationship
:twilightsmile:

2276152 I know I'm a bit late to reply, but you're welcome! I'm always happy to share my thoughts, and thank you for taking the time to read what I had to say.

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I don't care what everyone else says.............. THIS IS ONE OF THE BEST SHIPS EVER. Well that's just me personally they just seem right for one another. Again that's just me. Anyway great job on the story, it was one of the best I could find. :)

3171361 Gosh, thank you so much for your kind words! :heart: Believe it or not, I'm sitting on the next chapter! :raritywink: I just want to make sure it's the best it can possibly be. Thanks for reading! :yay:

3175953 :yay: I can't wait for the next chapter and this calls for a ...............VICTORY SCREEEEEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Third-person narratives are for world building, not exposition.

"Miracle of miracles, Fluttershy and Braeburn were able to whip up a cucumber birthday cake for Angel before the day was done. Perhaps even more impressive was Fluttershy being able to get through the baking session in one piece. Braeburn recounted all his stories of life in Appleloosa since making peace with Chief Thunderhooves and the other buffalo. Fluttershy absorbed every drop of his words. What struck her most was his passion. Even uninteresting topics like caring for Applejack’s former tree, Bloomberg, were riveting simply because of the electric energy Braeburn had. He carried himself with such an unflappable confidence that Fluttershy couldn’t help but be drawn to his words."

This scene sounds interesting. Might you consider SHOWING US INSTEAD!?

He and Braeburn didn’t hug; they shared a bro-hoof.

JUST CALL IT A HOOF BUMP!!

Well it looks like I came to this party late, but I love this story! I have been trying to write FlutterBurn and I am no where near this! Pure mastery of this ship! Congrats!

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