Human voyages of the Equestrian bedroom

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kalash93

kalash93 #1 · Feb 8th, 2013 · · · Day 59 (Human X Rarity) "Rarity and the Paparazzi" ·

Not bad for something you wrote in 60 minutes. However, you could have at least done some editing afterwards. This story is in dire need of polish. Other than that, it's not too shabby for pointless clop. The fakeout ending was pretty funny. I'd also give this the comedy tag.
You win 2/5 flutteryays. Given the circumstances, I also give you a spikestache for doing it while drunk and under a time limit, plus for also sticking to the rules.

shadowtempest47

shadowtempest47 #2 · Feb 8th, 2013 · · · Day 59 (Human X Rarity) "Rarity and the Paparazzi" ·

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I did do some editing afterwards but I couldn't change too much of it without ruining the spirit of '60 minute challenge'. Also my sober second look wasn't available before the deadline so I had to go in both feet first and hope I got most of the rougher edges,

But thank you for the criticism, I appreciate it, considering this was the first thing I have every put out for public consumption in my eleven years of casual writing.

kalash93

kalash93 #3 · Feb 8th, 2013 · · · Day 59 (Human X Rarity) "Rarity and the Paparazzi" ·

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You're welcome. Perhaps I was a bit too harsh on it. You did this while drunk and in 60 minutes. I'll add a proviso to your score and give you story a like.

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