Memories are to be kept. Some are merely figments of one's life and others last a lifetime. What she has is something different. Something she wants to forget, but can't. Her memories turn to nightmares, then to clues to knowing what she did in the past. I've been her best friend ever since we're foals. Until then, she never forgot about me.
I have to be there to solve this mystery, but I'm not alone. I have help from a couple of powerful alicorns and a strange unicorn that I keep forgetting. Weird.
This is my first fanfic, so constructive criticism is appreciated. I would consider your advice on writing if you have any.
"Gore" rating for some bloody scenes.
Chapters (4)
Liking it so far.
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Thanks.
Also, thanks for the fave. I appreciate it.
Cool story, keep it up!
So far, yes, very cute
... also strangely nostolgic. 
Caramel reminds me of myself when I was younger (well, younger than now--21--more like when I was in middle school and high school). He partially self-based?
I noticed it was a bit hard to follow sometimes (kinda "bumpy" and "trying-out"--ask me what I mean if you want a better description) and the *s were kinda strange for a story. But, honestly, you have a clear develpoing voice, no doubt, and your writting shows a true talent!
Over all, I like it! Keep it up!
"If you hear a voice inside you say you cannot paint, then paint! and that voice will be silenced."--- Vincent van Gogh
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Thanks for the advice!
I'll keep all of those in mind.
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Thank you!
you ever had the feeling that someone has to leave a comment or else the artist might give up?
in htis case it would be a horrible waste, the potential this chapter has given is practically explosive, i´ll definitely keep an eye on this one( or with the new system rather a star ^^)
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Yes, I do have that feeling. I've been really working hard on this one and I'm glad you like it.
This is nice, an interesting love story I do believe I will keep an eye out for future updates.
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Please do. I WILL NOT LET YOU BE DISAPPOINTED!!!
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That is good to hear, I am looking forward.
Your writing style is a little bit hard to follow for me, but I'm enjoying this. Do you have an editor or proofreader? (I can see a few things that could have the wording changed a bit to make it a little easier to follow. If you'd like I could take a shot at doing some editing for you, maybe send me a PM or something. I haven't really done any kind of writing in a long time.)
I haven't actually seen any kind of a premise quite like this little story you've got going on. Crazy dreams and a pony whose talent seems to be fire, the princesses getting worried about her? (I think) for some reason. You've got the potential for something really awesome and original here.
Like I was saying, if you'd want an amateur to try his hand at editing/proofreading, let me know. (Been kind of wanting to try to do something like this for awhile.)
Enough of my 4am rambling, good story with lots of potential. Allons-y!
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I don't have an editor or proofreader. I write things by myself and I'm content with it. But I'd appreciate some help with the story.
And the story is kinda crazy at first, but it will flow steady soon enough.
excellent story, loving it so far, but have you mentioned their cutie marks?
i dont remember seeing flares cutie mark, or caramels for that matter...
if not, can you include them somewhere? maybe make them foreshadow something?
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I have Flare's cutie mark on the cover art, but I didn't mention it. Caramel, on the other hand, will be revealed later in the story.
Thanks for reminding me that!
Amazing
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Why thank you!