The last one standing. (Edited Edition)

by foppp

The fith

At this point there were only two of us left, and the elements of harmony were usless.
Equestria had lost its greatest strength, it was throwing the doors open to any ancient villan who cared to take over.
And they did.
Our old friend Discord roes from his stond bindings (again), and doomed us to chaos. But this time we couldn't all unite and stop him, and Celestia and Luna were our last hopes.
They fought him, the battle went on for nearly a year. We helped when we could, but they grew so weak Equestria plunged into a age of chaos cross harmony. Thankfully, Discord was weakened too.
There were gaps in the chaous, some ponies who acted normaly, and some animals that weren't unatual colours.
After a year and a half, Harmony was on the edge of destruction.
Though he was winning, Discord was nearly gone. He had none of his old 'humor' and we wasted no time with riddles. The fact remained that the twin rulers of the nation formerly known as Equestria had fallen. Discord started regaining strength.

She refused to take me with her.
She told me to remember her, to not lose hope when she was gone. Before she left that she cast a spell on herself, it took all the magical power that she had ever had, and ever would have if she had choosen not to do this.
This included that magic that everpony had inside them that kept them alive. She was going to use it all up in one go, one last spell.
And she did it. I don't know the details, but Equestria went back to normal, and they found her body in the throne room.
Twilight Sparkle was the fith to go.
My name is Rarity, and I am the last one standing.

Author's Note:

I hope you enjoyed the story! Please comment and like/dislike as you see fit.
I don't own any of the material, My Little Pony Friendship is Magic and all of its characters belongs to Hasbro.
Thanks for reading!

Comments

[Shahrazad]

Ok, I'm going to try and be diplomatic.

You need to run this by a proofreader STAT. When a spelling error slips by in your chapter title it's high time you slow down. (FYI: the chapter title should be "the Fifth" not "The fith"). There were some sentences that were just painful to read because of the spelling/grammar errors.

Second, is there a reason you are breaking up the story into such small pieces? All together this could be a single chapter. Or you could greatly expand each one into a full size chapter. There are no rules about how short or long you need to make chapters but 300-500 words is SHORT. It's so short it almost reads like a poem. Is that what you were going for? I don't think so since there isn't any particular rhyme or meter, but I could be wrong.

The best part of this was wondering which pony was going to make it. I figured it out around chapter four. I was hoping it would be Fluttershy cause that would be a little bit unexpected but oh well.

[Impress Me]

Go below me is right. I read them all and they all have numerous spelling mistakes. If this is poetic than the short chapters is forgivable, but even then the short chapters were REALLY pushing it. It was sad to an extent but I couldn't really get into it due to the errors in spelling.

[foppp]

1943375 thank you, (<not sarcasitic, It's just hard to tell in writing) I meant for the main thing to keep people reading to be that, I thought to story would be more dramatic/easyer to read split up into smaller pices. I don't like doing or reading long chapters, and it was not meant to me rhythmical or poetic in any way, but if it was and yo uliked it, great! thank you, and leave more comments if you want to,

[OkropnyPisarz]

Because grammar is too mainstream.

[Eighth Note]

if this is finished why does the status say incomplete??

[SuperPinkBrony12]

R.I.P Twilight Sparkle.

Rainbow Dash's death seems unlikely. Pegasi can control the weather and can fly through clouds so I doubt lightning could do much other than maybe blacken their coats.

Applejack's death doesn't make sense because if there were backups why wouldn't the delays be posted at the train station. Plus shouldn't there have been warning signals or flags to ensure no collisions occurred?

Pinkie Pie's death I really hate because well regardless of what some ponies might think Pinkie Pie would've shrugged it off. I really don't understand why some ponies couldn't just keep their mouths shut.

Fluttershy's death somewhat made sense but I really think she could've tried to use The Stare.

Twilight's death was the only one that I think actually could happen. She sacrificed herself to save Equestria.

Regardless you should've run this through an editor before posting because there are lots of errors.

[theYasha]

1943926
maybe because it isn't complete. it's rarity's story now.

and i love it so far.
i honestly thought it would be twilight still standing.
Rarity standing is an interesting twist. i can't wait to hear moar

[Totallyrandomdude]

1944844 When did I ever say it wasn't decent?

[SearingTyrannosaur]

Wow no rarity death... Man I really wanted to hear rarity die! sorry rarity but I don't really like you...

[Frost Wind]

I shed a tear for this story. You earned it

[foppp]

1943926 my falt! i'll update, thank you to everpony who rad adn commented, or just read. I know my spelling/grammar is bad, please dont waste comments on that, thank you for the critisizem!

[foppp]

1946289 thank you!

[foppp]

1944863 i agree!! glad i found sompony else!

[Lady Spider]

So just one question after all that (if somewhat in need of editing) awesome death writing, how does Rarity die

[foppp]

1947746 I honestly hadn't thought about that, over exposoir to beauty products?

[Lady Spider]

1948238

Sounds right haha!

[Rarity_Forever]

1946967 YES YOU DIDNT KILL RARITY

you. are. awesome.

[foppp]

1953593 why thank you . I only sorta like her, I just thought it would be a nice twist, because everpony thinks she'll be one of the ones that gets killed off really early

[foppp]

1982831 I don't object to grammar/spelling comments, they are true and i know that i am far from the best at it, but please try and ignore them and enjoy the story, im glad you found it touching

[foppp]

YAY, finally got off my but and edited those god awful spelling/ grammar mistakes
You may now read without having to put up with unreadable grammar mistakes.
You're welcome

[Revan]