Long lost stories of Loyalty
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It was kind of boring, but I saw some potential. It was kind of hard to get through, and nothing really happened. the end threw me. Not the best I have read, but was still good. I will look at more of your work, and I cannot wait.
Am I the only one who doesn't accept death and instead pictures that the elements do something to make it so the main 6 do not age, or their siblings/ spouse?
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wrong magical item, the One Ring that stops aging is three doors down
It was interesting. My only true quarrel with it is that nothing really happens in the story. Now, this would be a great introductory piece. If you were to make this a chapter fic with Scootaloo being the main character, it would be an intriguing introduction. But since it is not... I don't know how to feel.
I noticed a few grammatical errors in the piece. None that detract from the story at all, but if you read back through, you might catch them.
Not written poorly, so that's a plus. If only you would extend this for us
- Church
Only one born is needed to get the point across
Great story, but I have to agree - to some degree - with Church...this would be a great introduction, you might think of adding more
Also, I totally didn't expect it to be Scootaloo at the end. I expected it to be Dashie. But oh well :)