Luna reflects on her life with a close friend.
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Amazing. Like this is one of the best Luna fics. She is my favorite, and i have written 2 fics about her already. You did a great job capturing her and the element of her ignorance as a child and how sometimes a big sister isn't always wise, but sometimes taunting. This was so good oh my god.
Interesting, to say the least, although I wish you could expand a little bit on it (maybe one more chapter). You still get a
because it's a very well written story.
Interesting. This could blossom into a full-fledged story if done right.
Though there were a few typos.
Good story. I would like to see how it pans out. It was interesting to hear Luna talk about the start of Nightmare Moon, and her feelings about it. I think you did a good job capturing Luna's essence.
There were a number of typos. You also might want to try reading it aloud. I've found that it has always helped me find most grammatical errors or omissions.
Still, good job!
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Mind telling me where because I'm awful with that stuff, I'd owe the creator of spelling and grammar check millions if it was pay service.
“We know this must be strange for thee, but please do not worry,” she attempted to reassure.
Should be a period there, at the end of her speech, since she does not continue.
"Luna took a deep breath, “He is the god of chaos who rules Equestria before Celeatia and we. While he is in the world there is unrest and disorder. But so long as he is where he belongs sitting in stone among statues the world is safe.”"
Should be "ruled" and "Celestia"
Also it should be "ripe for an explosion" as it makes more sense.
Y'know, if you're planning moar chapters or need a proofreader for a different story just drop me a PM.
Very good story. An interesting take on the two sisters. You have earned yourself a like.