Pinkie tries to gain the courage to tell Fluttershy how she feels but fails and gets rejected at first. But Pinkie persists and wont give up until Fluttershy is hers
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FlutterPie? not a fan, but ill give it a read none the less.
this is so cute and oddly enough really not what i was expecting. i honestly thought it was gonna be something like pinke asks fluttershy to help with the cakes and she writes a message on one but you handled this so well. here's a track and CAKE but since i can't give cake through the internet, i'll give some stars instead.
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hmm, i'm quite enjoying this story. please, keep it up and you just got 5 stars from me :)
I saw the Title and my heart exploded... twice...
ready...
set...
D'AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAW!!!
Very cute story
FlutterPie? Hm, odd combination, but I'll roll with it.
Good story, but the lack of punctuation kinda throws me off.
It's like it was being narrated straight out of Pinkie's mind, without pause.
Really great, but needs better punctuation and grammar.
Tracking.
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That's actually exactly the sort of thing I'm wondering if this story is going into. Pinkie was *really* close to going into Creepy Pie territory there; I don't think I want to know what'd happen if Fluttershy hadn't sent that message to her.
Not enough punctuation.
Also, the flow is kinda off, and it was kinda hard to read, and I dislike your writing style.
I give it 3 stars.
thanks for all the feed back and keep sending it in this is my first story and ill try to improve with every new chapter/story
Rush ALL the story!
Though still cute, Pinkieshy is Pinkieshy and that always makes a story good for me.
I sort of Rushed through this one and im terribly sorry for that. it may not seem so or maybe it does' but i didn't started writing this one until more than three months after finishing the first chapter that i uploaded just recently
134176 *Insert "All the things" dude here*
Overall it was nice and sweet. A few critiques:
1) You made a huge deal of Fluttershy's whole internal conflict between liking Pinkie, but yet being raised to think that way is wrong. This chapter, from the looks of it, you almost threw that whole dynamic out the window.
2) You totally should've played up the Pinkie acting like a freakin' noble more. Potential comedy gold there!
3) The whole boat ending was done way too fast. Lengthen the whole "I hate the Rarity-Pinkie" personalty deal I guess.
In either case, it got a smile from me, so I approve
139383 i thought it was funny, pinke pie acting like perfect host. besides even though it was rushed just teeny weeny bit too fast, i still love this story. AWESOME.
The only problem I had was the quickness and punctuation. But at the end, I have one thing to say. And that one thing is: Giggity.
Someone make a FlutterPie clopfic!!!
140814 read this http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7364025/1/Perfectly_Framed
very cute, just 1 thing, dont make chapter 3 a clopfic.....please?
" I’ll be alone forever"
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That art, were did you find that art...Tell me!
(Please)