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Purveyor of substandard horse-words since 2012. [they/them]

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UThat, right there... That was the definition of a shirt but sweet story. Your prose is exquisite, your character portrayal was spot-on, and not an error in sight. Fantastic work.
10 out of 10, into my favorites this goes.
If you enjoy it, please keep writing. You could easily excel some day :twilightsmile:

That... wasn't so bad. But the romantic ending felt really awkward. And I don't feel much of a pull to find out what happens next.

I think in stories where the character's emotions are very important (virtually all romance), you need quite a bit of monologue or some other way to demonstrate their feelings, and this could use a lot of that.

865544 Thanks, glad you liked it.

865547 I agree, I am quite awkward.

This was a nice little story, the ending was quite cute.

865811 Thank ya! :twilightblush:

I can only echo the previous compliments.

Though I am wondering. Is there going to be more of this? It says it's completed, but the "Chapter: 1" title suggests otherwise.

865833 "Chapter 1" is just the default title it puts if you don't name the chapter. This is all I'm doing with this story. It's done. Glad you liked it though! :pinkiehappy:

865838 Ah, I see. I got the feeling it was a one-shot the way it ended, was just wondering 'sall. :twilightsmile:

865544 i feel the same way :yay:

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But seriously, thanks for the compliments. You don't know how much they mean to me.

D'awww! What a cute story! I'm also pleased by the lack of spelling and grammatical errors!

878455 Yeah, sometimes it pays to be a Grammar Nazi. Trust me, I wouldn't dream of posting this if it had bad grammar.

Nice story :heart:

Well, um, I liked it but, um, let me tell you about my cats...

wow amazing story its awesome! I really liked the ending its cute i really like this story keep up the good work! :yay::pinkiesmile:

You made a FlutterPie and it tasted like ponies. :pinkiesmile:
Yea that was lame but still...:facehoof:
Cute read this was.:yay:

This is so sweer! :pinkiehappy: :heart: :fluttershysad: :applejackunsure:

The beginning almost made me cry.. Poor Flutters!

Yep their love child is going to be named Gental Pie!

I read this story earlier today, and, ironically, my dog died about two hours ago. Not saying this is cursed, but a pretty freaky coincidence.

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