Love Makes Me Derp

by Blue Thunder

Ch.2

Ditzy was flying faster then she had flown before, which wasn't that fast to begin with. She preferred a more leasuraly pace to enjoy the sights. But there was no time for that now, she was late for her meeting with Rainbow Dash at the Cloudesium.

Landing at the gate's she scans the crowd, searching for a hint of rainbow. 'Where is she, She has my ticket. Oo Why didn't we meet up before the show. She hears her name being called and spots a cyan hoof waving from over by a side entrance. She pushes through the crowd, coming out next to Rainbow Dash.

"What took you so long? I thought you weren't going to make it."

"And miss this? Never! I just slept in a little this morning that's all. So should we go get in line?"

"Nah, well just go in here."

Ditzy looks around expecting to see another line forming. She doesn't. Rainbow Dash walks over to the side door and knocks. A burly bouncer steps out and Rainbow Dash hands him the tickets. Ditzy walks up just in time to hear "Go on in Ms. Dash." Ditzy follows her through the door while the bouncer remains outside.

"What was that all about? Where are we going?"

"We got a private pox at the top. Saving Spitfire's life has some perks."

Ditzy smiles at the cocky mare.

"Um Ditzy, your eyes are doing there own thing again..."

Ditzy's eyes had been drifting randomly again and she hadn't even realized it. She concentrate's and they snap straight again. "Better?"

"Yea, are you sure your ok? You've been doing that more and more. Maybe we should go see Twilight after this."

"Yea, Ok."

They climb a set of stairs to the top in silence. Once they arrive Rainbow Dash opens a door and beckons Ditzy through. When she steps through she gasps at how high they were. She leans out and looks down, seeing 6 stories of boxes underneath them.

"Wow Rainbow Dash, we must be almost as high as the Princesses box!"

"Actually, were right UNDER the Princesses box."

Ditzy leans out again, this time looking up. Sure enough, there was the Princess sitting in her royal box with her guards. Ditzy waved to her, then stopped herself. 'What is wrong with me today? I haven't been like this since I finished my sessions with Twilight. I couldn't be going derpy again, could I? She pulls her head back in and sits next to Rainbow Dash.

"Hey, what's wrong? Your in a private box underneath the princess at a Wonderbolts show with the fastest flyer in Equestria, smile!"

Despite her sadness she manages a smile. Rainbow Dash turns back to the show. Ditzy drop the smile immediately, It didn't feel right when she wasn't even remotely happy. She turns her attention to the show just in time to catch the Grand Entrance and all thought of sadness vanish...

Comments

[Blue Thunder]

crap, I just realized how short this chapter was. Not to worry the next one will be much longer. I might come back to this one and lengthen it a bit but not right now. ENJOY

[TEK101]

I liked Derpy the way she was, and now she seems more self-conscious about herself. I am worried about her. overall, It is a good story so far, and I hope nothing bad happens to Derpy (I will call her Derpy because that will always be my name for her). can't wait to read more, please don't tell me what you are going to do with the story next because I want to be surprised, and good luck.

[zachgamr]

i love derpy just how she is why did have sessions with twilight we love you derpy

[Soviet Power Supreme]

HELLO!!!!!!!!!! COMRADE!!!!!!!!!
Well, here's someone I haven't seen in a fair few months, if your willing, we should catch up sometime. But enough with the pleasantries, even though its been months and let us get on with the review, though it may lack in standards as I have not given a review in ........ god doesn't know how long.

A short chapter may it be, it still had some interesting features. The fact that derpy/ditzy is losing the gift of intelligence, given by twilight, is a real grabber to almost any reader. I also liked that rainbow dash is in with Da group, in with Da posse, that she knows people, y'know, that could make a good story, rainbow knowing people, making her way up the ladder of power, having a gang and ruling the streets of Ponyville and expanding outwards Till reach canterlot, then they have a war with the city guard.... I'm rambling on a bit aren't I?

What is this!?! You cannot be Devon Manaseri, where his work contained many a punctuation and spelling mistake, I see non here visible to a read.

Overall I give it 4/5
This is because it could have contained a bit more detail and would have therefore been longer.

Don't forget, pm me if you want to catch up, don't if ya don't, ok dude, love long and tolerate.