Braeburn is the makeshift tour guide for the town of Appleoosa's growing number of visitors. He enjoys his job and is paid enough to get by, leading a pretty good life. One evening, Vinyl Scratch, disheartened and bitter, turns up in Appleoosa seeking solace. Braeburn, being the friendly face of the small settlement, extends a professional gesture of hospitality. Things get quickly personal, as the duo are pulled into a friendship tied closely with Vinyl's problems, and Braeburn's efforts to help her sort things out.
Chapters (4)
You have my attention.
will read later.
pinki promise
so far, so good.
Hmm... a Vinyl Scratch story that doesn't have her paired off with Octavia? Alright I'll give it a shot.
Interesting so far, some issues like not always starting a new paragraph when a different character starts to speak. Unlike some I don't mind the use of single quotes with speech.
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My formatting is utter shit. thanks for not being irked
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No it's not, I've seen fics that have "utter shit" formatting yours isn't close to being that bad.
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that was embarrassing...I didn't proofread
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I didn't find this chapter odd at all. Looking forward to the continuation!
Good start so far. You should probably italicize thoughts though. I was Kind of confusing when you suddenly switched from third person to first person.
Another good chapter.
A few criticisms though
Appleoosa has buffalo, not bison
Fragment
Use double quotes for speech, single for thoughts
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Feedback received with gratitude. I'll make changes in the next few chapters.
Hmm, will have to keep an eye on this, I find it quite interesting.
I thought it was alright. Sure, could use some smoothing out....but I'm all for 'daww' moments.