LunaLover1990
Joined 22nd Nov, 2012 ·
Offline
Also LikedSimilarAuthor
- LunaLover1990 · 8.6k words · 19 6 · 1.1k views
- LunaLover1990 · 7.9k words · 37 28 · 1.6k views
Stats
Page generated in 0.123 seconds
Total duration
738 users online
650,866 hits today, 2,073,628 yesterday
FIMFiction
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Follow & Support Us
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
DO YOU EVEN LEARN?
media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2adwZhRo1r8b2g1.gif
Thanks for the criticizm. I'm going to be editing the stories as I go, and I encourage you all to treat me like the worst shit in the world in your criticizm! It inspires me to keep writing, and eventually, I'm going to hit this fucking nail right on the motherfucking head!
1737012
There we go.
Upvote.
1737013 Ah, so when I show I'm accepting of the criticizm, people approve? Good to know. Again, thanks for your hate EVER so much, it's going to make me get this shit better. I wish you the best of luck in your own fanfic writing. I give you 7 mustaches
You should have started with a different type of story. Jumping headlong into this sort of thing right off will be, at best, embarrassing for you. This is the worst story type to begin with, especially if you're new to this - you've essentially bitten yourself in the ass.
Start with something you're pretty sure you can pull off - comedy, for instance - then build up to different types. Work on our characterization. on't rush your story - there's no time limit and chapters don't need to be that small. Instead of just stringing words together and tossing them out put some thought into what you're doing, because you're going to be judged on it, and you'll likely not find the verdict pleasing.
dude. dude. go read this.
no seriously go read this
1737120 Like I said before, I'm going to be editing them as I go. Besides, I've never been very good at comedy, and if I tried some kind of dark or tragedy, it might be a bit too disturbing, as my mind is a virtual cesspool of vicious, evil thoughts deep within my psyche. Thanks for the advice, though.
1737175
At least try with something you're fairly sure you can pull off well. As an example, look at this.
Oky, so that probably a pretty massively overcomplicated example, but my point was I know I can pull off poetry, so that's what I did. And that was the work of three or four moths before I even posted it - yu don't need to post something immediately after you write it - edit it before, not after, because once they read something, they're not going to look at it again, regardless of whether you've improved it later.
You're going to be judged on what's there right now, and if they don't like what you've written, they won't take into account you'll 'tidy it later.'
1737210 Eh, well, by this point I doubt I'll have many readers anyway. I thank you for your advice, and once I finish my third part here, I'll try and see what kinds of things I can write. All I know is, if I do decide to write something dark, and it's declared the most disturbing thing since Sweet Apple Massacre and Cupcakes, then just know that it'll be all because of your suggestion
and that isn't negative, as those stories have as many people that love them as they do people that hate them, if not more! All I know is... I might end up frightening some people with my psychopathic/sociopathic tendencies 
Uh, don't count on it.
1737029 You want criticism to make you angry and write on?
This is the gayest fucking story I've ever read. It's as if you pulled a book out of your ass, and then revised it to be even worse. The people that participated in this piece of shit will all burn in hell when they die. You're the worst, and I hope that this effects the way that you are. You'll never be the man that you're mother is.
1738656 Ah, yes! THE CRITICIZM FEELS SO GOOD! AHAHAHAHA! YES! CRITICIZE MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
1738656 Btw, I worked on this on my own. Nobody else helped. SO YES, I GET ALL OF THE CRITICIZM!
1739491 >:D
cdn.smosh.com/sites/default/files/bloguploads/creepy-stare-cage.jpg
1739491
Dude, I work on my own fics as well.
Nobody helped me either, and look at where I am.
What you said was no excuse to write a good fan fic.
You just need a fresh start.
Maybe just a new story line.
Long before MLP, I've figured out that if nobody likes the start of your story, you write it again, but better. Stronger. Not necessarily faster, but it needs to be a story that has the power to appeal to Mostly everyone. You don't need to please everyone, just most of them (because not everyone is going to like you. We all have our own dislikers). That's when you know you have a good fan fic.
Hooah!
encrypted-tbn0.gstatic.com/images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSHixYhyagck10oezdrG7M1rsl9-JN4SGQ5Lo79xwmYhnlixXa2
What i Imagine.
Everybody, I would just like to say that I love you all, especially now that you hate me so much! Your criticizm is good!
1737013 Just out of curiosity, it seems you change your profile pic every week. Is that what you do, or is it purely coincidental?
(Joke) Alt. Title: I'm A Human And I Married Luna! Book 3: I Haven't Learned Yet, Is This Still Original?
>> 1811717 Love the hate, I love it!
Brav-F****** O, Man, i just absolutely love this story!
1836821 I am so glad to hear that! Dude, it's people like you who really make my day!
Edit: Also, I'm currently thinking of what all I could put in the next chapter. It's got to be at least a bit different than my written version of these, so that it's worth reading.
1836923LunaLover1990 Every new chapter of this makes my day dude.
1837057 Than you're gonna love it when these books end, because after this, I'm going to be doing a story of the life of the foal (or should I say foals? I'll explain later in the story) from age 4 to age 18!
1837211 You Bastard...i think thats posibly the most AMAZING NEWS IN MY LIFE ( as a brony ) I look forward to it, good sir.
It also helps me though seeing the end of this great story, it's good to know that you'r gonna wright a story of the life of their Foal,
Again, I look forward to it.
1837262 Thanks for the compliments, I look forward to writing this. Also, I've made this a self insert series, so... I'm marrying Luna later in the book. And I'll just hint off part of the names of the foal(s) now: They'll be named after certain celestial lights or happenings, depending on which they match the most.
DIS SHIT GON' B GUD!
1837284 WHY U MAKE HARDER FOR ME TO GUESS THEIR NAME?!... couse when it comes to that, I suck....HARD
1837308 I'll tell you part of one of the names: Shadow. That's all. NOW IT IS ALL THE MORE TANTALIZING!
1837326FFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU
1837367 *orcface*
Okay, I haven't read anything yet, but as someone who shares all the love for our princess of the night, I must say that I've found the premise very intriguing, and can't wait to actually start reading it. :-D (about to leave for a Christmas party, so can't yet)
1849561 Sounds great! I hope you're starting with the first book in the series, cuz other wise, won't make any sense. Honestly, it's a first-person self-insert story, so I'm not sure what you'll think of it, but I hope you like it!
1849600
Oh yeah, I realized that shortly after commenting. Definitely starting with book one :-D (in all actuality, I probably would've written a story similar to this, but you beat me to it)
1853228 Lol, doesn't mean you can't still write something like this :-D
Hey, I still think there is something missing in your story dude, you said that your character is a sea Alicorn correct? well why don't give him some divine powers? Give him the complete control of the ocean, and basically water, or something like that
I just…well other than levitated a towel, he hasn't experiment or discover his new powers, and that is just a incredible waist dude, you have to admit that that will make the story more interesting, show us what he can do as Alicorn, can he breath under water? Did he is like aquaman and all living things in the ocean obey his command? what is his special talent?
Other than that is a great story, just try to tun down the whole mellow things (its starting to get diabetic, and annoying, they said I love you A LOT) and focus a little more in what other things can you bring to the table
P.S: Did Celestia will be the one who married them or they going to have a wedding…human style?
1855625 First of all, I'm going to try and show the magical powers later on, the character, as I've stated, doesn't know how the magic works as of yet, so you'll find out soon. Second of all, Thanks for the compliment about the story being good other than the diabeetus being created.
Edit: I would also like to try and keep how the wedding will happen under wraps until I get it done, but they plan it in the Everfree Forest, so you can probably guess how it happens.
Everybody, please scroll to the bottom of the page on the latest chapter and read the author's note before reading the story itself. it is very important you do this.
Jeez man everytime there's a new chapter I think I cry a litte, that's how much I love this dude
1869179 Lol I'm glad you like it! I can't wait til you finish the latest chapter, got a twist to it! As M. Night Shymalan would: WHAT A TWEEST!
I'm confuse, how in his way to the castle he just end in the middle of the Ocean? And very depth of it for that matter?
Well this story became more interesting, and this Calypso must be very strong if she manage to seduce a freaking god, well a very weak and just discovering his power god, but a god not the lest.
Oh boy if he can control all water I can't wait to see what he can do with rain…or blood (going a little in avatar) Just a suggestion, every brain is inside a pool of blood all the time, is kind of a secondary defense system, thats why your head bleed if you get a depth cut…and also a interesting way to use your powers if you control water
1869486 Ah that might be helpful to use in the story. Also, he ended up in the middle of the ocean in the story because he wasn't watching where he was going, then flew into the side of a cliff. Maybe it was a beachside cliff? And, maybe he just drifted and fell deeper in the story. But, I'm glad to see you think the story is getting better! (also, if you've ever read the Odyssey, than you probably know that Calypso is a reference to Greek mythology!)
Edit: Also, my character isn't necessarily a god, more just a person gifted by the spirits. Lol, that would be pretty cool, though.
Good chapter. looking forward to next
1996534 Yeah, about that, you're probably gonna hate me for this, but I'm gonna give a break to writing for a while, just a week or two. I really need to get back to working on my FlutterDash story, and I need to think of a good plot for the second chapter.
1996544 oh, thats okay, everyone needs breaks
1996550 glad to see you understand
after seeing some of that latin I want to learn some now it seems like an interesting language