My Sweet Little Bloom

The Guy on Your Right #1 · May 17th, 2013 · 9 · ·

Okay. I've already read 'Sweet Apple Massacre' to know where this is going. And therefore, I'm going in dry.

Big Mac has gone insane for no apparent reason. He wants sex, he needs sex, all he can think about is sex, sex, sex! So, he's gonna rape his little sister.

I know the reason for that. Stallions started to develop estrus cycle.

Ah... evolution, why have you failed me?

(Rated with gore, just to be safe.)

Mkay...

Warning! This story will contain graphic portrayals of a controversial issue. Don't complain about it. You came here on your own. I didn't force you. I don't care if you don't think rape or incest is HAWT/funny, 'cause I do in some cases, and I wanted to write some. Don't tell about your own expreiences or those of someone close to you. Just read the story or don't. Don't be butthurt, it's just a story. Also, you should probably listen to this song while reading.

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Ahh!!! Stop with the warning, I got it already!!!

I just wanted to review the shit out of this story!!!

P.S., Anthroclop. Teenaged Applebloom.

Now this is the warning that should be placed in the description.

I don't like anthros, and it's already too late to know that this story contains is one. I guess that there's no turning back now.

Applebloom didn't know what was going on. One minute she was eating her breakfast, the next, she was knocked out, and the next, she was tied up in a dark room.

Ah... the sweet smell of rape in the morning... Oh wait, what...?

She didn't know what was going to happen. She didn't want to know, and hoped this was all just a dream.

I hoped too. I just don't want to live in a reality, filled with senseless fictions like this.

From some of the fanfictions she'd read, she knew something bad was going to happen. But wait, She thought. Scoots an' Sweetie ain't hur, so maybe it won' be another Sweet Apple Massacre!

Thank Celestia, AB, because this isn't Sweet Apple Massacre. It's just another rip-off, starring you, and your innocent brother.

"Hey thur, little sis!" She heard a deep, familiar voice say maniacally.
"B-Big Mac? W-what is this place? Why am Ah down here?" She began to panic.
"Y'all're 'bout ta fahnd out." Suddenly, he came over and punched her in the face.

Oh... way to build up the dark atmosphere.

"Aagh!" She cried out. Her nose started to bleed. Big Mac grinned

This is the first time I don't feel sorry for the victim in a story...

"Yeah... Ah like thayat..." He reached down and ripped off AB's skirt to reveal her panties. She was crying when he did this. "Wha are ya doin' this ta me?" Tears poured down the side of her face.

I guess doing this kind of reviews is pointless, knowing that this is just another trollfic.

But got nothing to do.

"Don't cry, sis," He whispered into her ear, as he slid her underwear off of her legs. "Yer gonna be a big girl now."

I was going to place an image, quoting "I have the weirdest boner right now". But sadly, I still don't have one.

Big Mac got on his knees and leaned his head down to her young pussy. He sniffed once. "Mmm... Smells lahk apples." Big Mac begin to lick her clam.

Ah... I couldn't find any pictures of a clam, with an apple inside of it.

Ah, again... Internet, I'm so disappointed in you.

Drops of early arousal began to drip out, staining his tongue. He smiled at this. He ripped off his little sister's shirt, and began massaging her blosseming breasts.

Ugh... such poorly-written clopfics made me shed a tear. And it's not liquid pride, that's for sure.

Big Mac bitchslapped her. "Shut up, ya bitch!" She obeyed, frightened by what else he might do. Big Mac grinned, and went on.

[sarcasm] This story has aroused me, greatly. [/sarcasm]

He... He felt bad, for a split second. He didn't want to hurt his little sister. He loved her, he really did. He just needed to have sex, and he wanted his little sister to feel grown-up.

Oh... revelations... I feel sorry for Big Mac; really, really sorry for the guy.

Applejack had already left years ago, and the Apple Family needed a new, adult Applebucker.

This is the reason why some hentai are bad. Cause, the characters think that they could help a teenager grow up, by fucking their brains out.

Oh God.

But, it was just for a second. He looked down at his little sister's Cutie Mark on her cute little thigh. A sweet little apple bloom. That got him going.

I just can't, you know? This story isn't really that worth wasting time with, even if I don't have anything else to waste time with.

Goodbye, folks.

Mr Pones

Mr Pones #2 · May 17th, 2013 · · ·

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There are no breaks on the rape assembly line.
(can't find the pic)

Autumnfire

Autumnfire #3 · May 17th, 2013 · · ·

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2589126 this almost makes up for how bad the story is.

Drawdex

Drawdex #4 · May 18th, 2013 · · ·

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2589126

You beat me to it, I'm also bored out of my mind, but from what you said I'm glad I didn't read.

Good recapture of the troll fic for all to see, have a moustache.

JBL

JBL #5 · May 19th, 2013 · · ·

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This was...... something

Collins4112

Collins4112 #6 · May 27th, 2013 · · ·

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2589126 dude. I just come to these terrible stories to hope to see your reviews.

The Guy on Your Right

The Guy on Your Right #7 · May 27th, 2013 · · ·

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2636214 Well okay. Glad you like it. Even though there are a lot of rage reviews that are better than mine.

Aggron

Aggron #8 · May 29th, 2013 · · ·

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Too short, started weird but got better, all in all a good 7/10.

Regidar

Regidar #9 · Jun 7th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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>Chapter name

Mile High

Mile High #10 · Jul 30th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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I know just about every one thought about nirvana when thay saw the 1st chapter title

Shadow Star

Shadow Star #11 · Sep 1st, 2013 · 1 · ·

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Add tag: anthro

thesilentpony

thesilentpony #12 · Nov 28th, 2013 · · ·

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it made me laugh hard ;p

Super_Big_Mac

Super_Big_Mac #13 · Nov 28th, 2013 · 1 · ·

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2589126 I was planning on riffing this, but you already have. Well done.

snivyeeveeskyfan

snivyeeveeskyfan #14 · Nov 28th, 2013 · · ·

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Fallen Dreams

Fallen Dreams #15 · Dec 5th, 2013 · · ·

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I have the weirdest boner right now...

LittleBoyBlue

LittleBoyBlue #16 · Dec 14th, 2013 · · ·

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Yammy.

Superanon74

Superanon74 #17 · Dec 29th, 2013 · 2 · 1 ·

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this story was really shit...... fucked up aspect aside: it doesn't even hold up as a good clopfic. too fucking short. lack of build-up, lack of detail...... this just sucked.

oh, and by "this story is shit": i dont mean this is "the shit"...... i mean this was the worst clopfic i have ever read..... the fucking my immortal parady was more entertaining than this.

"he put his dingeling in my you know what and we had sex" THIS WAS BETTER THAN THIS SHITE

Teamzigger

Teamzigger #18 · Jan 4th, 2014 · · ·

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Fucking NICE.

Teamzigger

Teamzigger #19 · Jan 4th, 2014 · · ·

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3731240 I change my fucking mind, I want a refund.

Artisin Note

Artisin Note #20 · Jan 11th, 2014 · · ·

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3698493 i unfortunately have to agree with this statement, as rude as it is, this story could have gone a lot better! "you're much bigger then sweetiebells" ...... T_T....."horn"..... really? thats.... thats how its going to end! really?

darkstripe134

darkstripe134 #21 · Apr 7th, 2014 · · ·

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15 clops ina ded mans bllzsck 14 clops in a segulls kayak 13 ejaks in a masqerador early in teh morning

BlitzKrank

BlitzKrank #22 · Jul 23rd, 2014 · · ·

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2589126 Dude... CLEARLY nothing stops the rape train, in your case verbal, LOLZ!

Anyways, This story waaaaas... Well, in the best terms i can think of, It's about as deep and interesting as a puddle in Los Angeles: Not very, murky at best, and Short lived... Now, I offer this as constructive crit, If you come back to redo this story, It may yet have some potential. That being said, I think you have more to offer this story in terms of Ideas and story. No one ever got hurt by going back and improving anything... well... accept for that one time when they repainted the Hindenburg... but that was a one time thing!!!

Crafty-Inky-Quill