(disclaimer: This story is a bit of a mess in its current state. you were warned)
Daring Do, the famous explorer. She's supposed to be fast and strong and most of all brave But why is she hiding beneath disguises? Why does she seem so jumpy? Why is she traveling with Trixie of all ponies? Something just doesn't add up for the so called adventure mare. And who is the mysterious stallion known as Solomon Colt? And what is this hulking monster that attacks them in the dead of night? Why is abbreviation such a long word?
Will Trixie and Daring Do be able to team up and fight the terrifying Werepony?
(Second fiction, meant to be a mild comedy.)
-Zephyscribe
Chapters (2)
That was awesome! more more!
You need to do more proofreading. You change point of view several times, for example this one starts out from a narrator and then changes to first person:
The publishers were always on her flank, urging her to write more but what could she do when in between a (writers) block and a hard place. I will figure it all out in the morning…in the morning things will be better…in the morni… she gently drifted off to sleep.
The tense isn't consistent either, ranging between past and present (that is sometimes things are being told as if the whole story already happened and sometimes as if it is happening right now, such as the chair tipping bit).
You've also got some typos like "s magician" when you want "a magician" and some odd word choices, but those are actually less bothersome.
The idea isn't bad, though, it's just a lot of technical things that need polishing.
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In terms of the tense changing bit, that is usually a character inner thoughts, which grammatically are supposed to be italicized but that did not carry over when i uploaded it. And as for the, "s magician" part, i totally noticed that mistake and many others but when i went through and fixed a bunch of things it refused to save. I haven't gotten around to trying again.
STOP GETTING THE NAME WRONG!
ITS LIKE TALKING TO A BRICK WALL I SWEAR