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After suffering a severe incapacitating anxiety attack on one of her quests, Daring Do runs away to be in solitude. The jungle safeguards her and lull's her into a trance. But the trance is broken when Daring realizes that if she does not leave, she will die and be forgotten, like dead leaves blown away in the wind.

(Although this is not really a "dark story" per-say, the themes addressed in it are on the mature side.)

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Nice fic, really gives a look into Daring's head in the escape phase of her adventure.

I need not kill for food, with so much death surrounding me all I had to do was look a while and I would find something that I could sustain myself on.

She is talking about plants and stuff right?.....Right?:rainbowderp:

Comment posted by Zephyscribe deleted Sep 8th, 2013

3165940 Thanks, i didn't think anyone would actually want to read this:P Its not the most exciting fic. As for the quote :3 I suppose that's up to your imagination imagination.

3165940 A new commented enticed me to re-read this story. And wow there are a lot of mistakes and segments of poor word choice. I went back and fixed a whole bunch of things that were wrong.

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I need not kill for food, with so much death surrounding me all I had to do was look a while and I would find something that I could sustain myself on.
She is talking about plants and stuff right?.....Right?:rainbowderp:

As for the quote :3 I suppose that's up to your imagination imagination.

I have used my imagination squared and it goes straight to her eating animal life!:raritydespair::pinkiecrazy:
When it was left running a bit longer, it also included her going Bear Grylls on the jungle, and eating bugs and fresh carcasses!:rainbowlaugh::raritydespair::pinkiecrazy:
I guess her being an opportunistic survivalist eating what was easily available (including carcasses) was likely your intent.

I went back and fixed a whole bunch of things that were wrong.

:raritystarry:!
Well then, I shall give it a re-read soon!:twilightsmile:

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I reread it!:twilightsmile:
Didn't notice much different aside from the use of semicolons here and there and I don't remember the ending location having rain.

Couple things I did notice:

I society that I, the Adventurer, had become a part of.

I think you meant "A society that I...."

I need not kill for food, with so much death surrounding me all I had to do was look a while and find something that could sustain me. The forest did the work and I shared in its reaping. But finally the time came when I would be held accountable, when it would be my turn to pay back the forest for keeping me alive. But today was not a day which I wished to be feasted on, and so;once again, I ran.

In writing, don't start sentences with a "but" (teehee!:rainbowlaugh:). A "but" is supposed to have a comma either before or after it (location I think is personal preference from what I remember) since it connects ideas/sentences.
I'm not an English major, its just a nugget I remember from high school English classes (which was a while ago since I'm a grad student:twilightsheepish:).

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