The true worth of a soldier lay in her ability to defend and protect, not to harm and kill. These are the words spoken by the one that calls forth the power of the Sun.
The Sun does not reveal truth. Its light only burns and blinds. These are the words spoken by the one that calls forth the power of the Moon.
Having been born and raised in the same soil, in the same teachings, but growing up differently caused such a rip between the two sisters; have they met sooner not later, would have impacted on the way they have to live.
Now in the face of battle, forcing one owns beliefs to the other, and with a wierd twist of fate, they are transported to a new land. A land where both the moon and the sun work together in Unison, will they ever set their differences apart? or will this world suffer?
I was wondering when something like this would show up!
YES! I shall be following this closely!
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An interesting concept, and one that I would sincerely like to see developed, however, there are several problems that I noticed in this chapter. The biggest is that you need an editor and a prereader badly. There are a lot of grammatical errors and more than a few areas where a prereader would point out confusingly worded sentences and poor word choices that could be changed to better convey the story you're trying to tell. I can see from what you've written here that you have an interesting and compelling story to tell, you just need a little help polishing it so that the words on the page are better able to capture the thoughts that inspired them.
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I couldn't agree more, english isn't actually my 1st language, and i have a rough time going with grammars and stuff, I'm just not that kind of writer, but if any are able to give a helping hand, i would so much appreciate it. I even use google if my words are correct lol.