Now, heres an idea for a story that EVERYPONY has heard: Rainbow Dash teaches ole Scoots how to fly. Now this, though, this is original. Scootaloo was a late bloomer. She didn't know how to fly as a filly, and was often rejected for it. And now, when Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle get their cutie marks, Scootaloo is left friendless. The only way she can return is to rise.
Rise through the sky.
On beautiful amber wings,
Light the sky on fire,
With the jealousy you bring.
Rise through the sky.
Let your will shine through,
and they'll come to accept you,
Oh, young Scootaloo.
For you, my filly,
are different than the rest.
You can rise through the ranks,
And prove that you are best.
Rise through the sky,
they know not who you are.
But I know clear,
A Valkyrie you are.
Interesting idea. You write pretty dang well, but there were some errors I picked out here and there, things like capitalization.
"they could take to the skies for the first time, and automatically become a pro"
But that ^ just seems really off-mood. It's really distracting. Not that big of an issue, but the word, 'pro' just doesn't ring right.
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What?
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oohhh.
Pinkie Pie's interactions with the Cutie Mark Crusaders was very entertaining.
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Thanks.
Normally I can't write Pinkie worth a darn. After all, who can? She's about as predictable as Schrodinger's cat. (Haha, Big Bang Theory reference)
HERE! Here are all the chapters I have done so far. Working on chapter five now. Should be done soon.
This story just keeps on getting better! Poor Scoots . . .
This made sootaloo my fav pony, which means you just made pinkie stop being my fav. DO YOU HAVE ANY IDEA HOW GOOD YOU HAVE TO BE TO DO THAT
Whens the next chapter coming out
I really enjoy this story but I`m just wondering
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I work on chapters for this on fridays. Weekends i'm under too much survielance, and every other day I'm at
school'work'.short but like it ?? wait what happened to rainbow and her
Hey, look! I've finally gotten around to doing something! I'm sorry it took so long, but almost every day I think of a new storyline, and have to put it into action. But don't focus on that, focus on this:
This is back!
And arguably better than ever!
Evjoy the chapter, hopefully it's worth the wait...
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Yes, actually, I do.
You see, Pinkie Pie is number three on the Most Popular Favorites list, just behind Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, and Scootaloo is about number fourteen. Therefore, when applied with the algorithm of how many of my fics you've seen, willingness to read this, and stubourness, it comes out to about a writer's skill of 11.466836. So, I'd fall between the writer brackets of [Fairly Good] and [good].
For Example, if there was somebody who likes Fluttershy most, and I write a fic about Sparkler (Yeah, nobody knows who that is) and it changes Sparkler to their favorite Pony, it would take a writers skill of about 2,675.9926645381538264, which falls between [Godly Good], and [So Heart Felt-ly good that I almost cried].
So, in conclusion, yes, I know how good I have to be to do that: Fairly to Good.
Also, just ion case you want it, here are the algorithms for finding out your authors skill:
X=Y/3+([S+T+E] X 4/5Q)
X=Writer's skill
Y=Current Favorite
Q=New Favorite
S=Stubourness
T=Willingness
E=Experiance with my fics
Stubourness Algorithm:
Y/(7X+ Sq. Rt. of W)=S=Y/5
Y=Current Favorite
X=How much thought you've given to your favorite
W=Willpower
S=Stubourness
Willingness Algorithm:
(Y X Sq. Rt. of X)/6W
Y=Current Favorite
X=How much thought you've given to your favorite
W=Willpower
good story cant wait for More
Shouldn't Applejack be arrested? I mean, yeah, Scoots is an orphan, but Applejack can't hurt a filly that way, that's just plain Foal Abuse.