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School for New Writers9,689 stories ·5,015 members

You Just Had To Look Inside...

What happens when you build a Wormhole Projector in your basement, based upon the plans of somepony in a padded room? Nothing good of course! Amparo decided to go against Twilight's advice and must now suffer the consequences of his actions. Did I mention that he wind's up in an Equestria with a certain sex obsessed princess?

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SoarinPie

SoarinPie #1 · Oct 10th, 2012 · · ·

Started off pretty well...then got boring...then I got confused. Not bad, just wish that it didn't feel so rushed.

Amparo

Amparo #2 · Oct 10th, 2012 · · ·

1418190

This is my first fic so I haven't really found my style yet. Thanks for reading though!

NeotheTwilitUnicorn

NeotheTwilitUnicorn #3 · Oct 11th, 2012 · · ·

Not bad...not bad. I'm going to watch this...and wait.

epicdonus1123 BOT

epicdonus1123 BOT #4 · Oct 13th, 2012 · · ·

1421235>>1418190 Ditto. After a bunch 'f inappropriately thrown in references, an' a bunch of boredom extinguished my interest, I officially gave up. Howe'er, due t' curiosity, I finished th' story, an' admittingly, this story sucks. I even tried listening to good music wit i', but nothing happened that reeled me. Like th' usual troll author, ya could've thrown th' usual "And then they all had sex.", an' I would've liked it.

Prisoner 24601

Prisoner 24601 #5 · Oct 13th, 2012 · · ·

Hello. I'm the most important man/woman/other to comment on this tory. I would just like to say: good call submiting this to school for new writers. Also, you shouldn refrain from putting yourself in the story. It kind of paints you as a self-obssesed, egotistical douchebag. Which you might be, I don't know, but you don't want people thinking you're like that. It's not exactly how you get story favorites and followers. As for the fic, I honestly haven't read a word of it. Judging by the description, it seems to be pretty good, but when I looked at the like to dislike ratio, and the comments.... So, yeah. I'll read this anyway, and give my full opinion upon your user page. For now, goodby.