It's another normal day in Ponyville, which means there's a friendship problem going on that will be resolved in about thirty minutes or so. But that's not how real life works. Fanfiction writers know this. So we deviate at times from the MLP series canon and run with our own ideas for characters in series, often creating a very different and at times better representation of the characters than the show did! So what would happen if "Canon Luna" met "Fanon Luna"? Read on to find out (AND SOMEONE PLEASE GIVE LUNA A FRICKEN EMOJI!! Even that random nerd filly has an emote, A RANDOM NERD FILLY!!?!?!? Like bruh...)
OC: Fanon Luna, beloved by many readers on FimFiction and written in a near endless host of ways and personalities 
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Who doesn't like Luna? Or any of her various depictions? I certainly am always glad to find a Luna fic...
Okay, I am a Luna fan, of course. This small bit of words did appeal to me; it is Luna being Luna after all...
For concept, meh. I read a similar tale with the various Anons in fanfiction, so it is just another version of that with Luna instead of Anon. (And why is Anon always green-faced??? Anypony out there tell me why?)
For execution, I was quite entertained by the story..
All in all, a nice story.
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Glad to hear you like the story!
As for the concept being similar to a story about all the Anons in one place, I actually think I know what story you're talking about. The one I read was a great story, but I had no intention of copying it. That was a coincidence 😂 I did put extra emphasis in my title on "Probably" since I haven't read UNGODLY AMOUNTS of fiction like some have and my genre interests are narrow.
Also, I don't know why Anon is green, maybe to anonymize race too?
Thank you for reading and reviewing and have a great day!
Preeeetty cute!
This is good
That’s why every real pony carries an M1911 chambered in .45 ACP to work. 9mm might kill the body, but .45 ACP kills the soul to make sure they don’t come back as a seasonal villian.
This reads like a TF2 sfm. I love this.
The only unrealistic thing about this whole story. Completely ruined my immersion smh.
Exactly, why DON’T they have an official military? It seems like 90% of problems can be solved with big gun, or maybe bigger gun, but they always try friendship instead (like 50% of the time they end up having to resort to WMD’s to win. Just create a military, all problems suddenly go away.)
This really feels like just a rant. It’s pretty cool, dialogue could use some work. Overall structuring as well. But it more or less feels like how when someone animates something to specifically be broken or “bad”. Might be digging somewhere where I’m not supposed to, but this whole thing feels intentionally “bad” to make fun of “bad” stories.
Otherwise, I love this. Definitely following you, with some improvement you definitely can become a good writer.
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To a certain degree, it is "bad" on purpose (making fun of some common Luna tropes) but the dialogue/structure is because it actually is bad. I appreciate the feedback you gave me:
1) Not totally sure how to fix the rambly dialogue
(So yeah, it feels like a long rant because that's exactly what it is 
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2) This was a one shot written in roughly 1-2 hours and is indeed me writing whatever comes to mind to try to make my basic concept 1k words
3) I sent this to my friend for a proofread because I knew the story was a little off and not my best, but he said it was fine so I published it.
4) If you'd like to send me any edits or more advice on what I could fix, feel free to PM me! I really do want this story to be good after all and I know it could use some of my usual polishing
-sigh- a shame I did the math just to be told this
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Oh, one more funny note
Story I half assed in about 1-2 hours and was posted last Wednesday or something like that: 12 likes 2 dislikes
Story I slaved over (and is projected to be like 200k+ words long) and was posted months ago and updated sort of regularly: 9 likes 3 dislikes (And yes, I like my own stories just cause if that helps you put the statistics in scale)
And this is the story of writing on FimFiction 😂 Just write something dumb and clickbaity and people will like it 💀
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Such as life, most authors are practically guaranteed to have their actual life work to be sadly pushed aside in favor of that one random piece they did because reasons. Site traffic could have also caused that one not to be read. This is just a sad fact of life, too many people don’t want to start reading long stories because they are just that, long.
Also the part I said was unrealistic was just a sarcastic joke playing on the fact that youtube has like a million ads per cubic minute of watching, basically don’t fret over that specific part, unless this was sarcasm then ignore this whole paragraph due to my inability to detect some sarcastic comments.
While I do agree this story could use a slight rewrite of dialogue, I do think it’ll lose some of its appeal and charm. This is a good story, I don’t think it’s worth completely ironing out every mistake when they really don’t hurt the story one bit, and possibly even improve it. Another reason I won’t help in that regard, be it a bit selfish, is that I suck at deadlines/expectations and Jinglemas is already taking most of whatever will to write that I have. I got like 10 days left and I’m probably gonna have to man up and just finish it in like 5 days. Procrastination be damned.
Anyways, hope you get more attention, wishing you luck, Foxtrot over and out.
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Ok, good to know. It was only after I sent the reply that I realized you were referring to the "ad-free" part of my joke, not the "82 hours" part LOL. I was also being a bit sarcastic or at least lighthearted in my tone 😊 I actually did do the math and had to say "ad-free" because I wasn't about to try to calculate the hours PLUS ads (which can fluctuate heavily) so I took the lazy (if not "unrealistic") way out of having to more than the simple math needed to calculate the time spent based on the actual episode lengths. Even then, I think the calculator said something like 81.78or something like that hours. Accounting for that one hot cocoa break I guess 🙃
I'm glad this story has "charm" (I did actually try to play off my "I don't feel like coming up with details rn" mood as "humor" on purpose cause I'd seen other writers and SilverQuill on YT use this method of humor [Super ancient quote I never forgot: "Wait, but you're a griffon. Can't you fly?" "Nah, my editor's too lazy to do that" -promptly jumps into oblivion-]. I also purposefully added lots of self-awareness to the Fanon-Luna character about the fact that she's written by me to help people be a little more accepting of the fact that this story is a fairly underdeveloped one-shot)
Now that I think about it, a lot of the "wrong stuff" in this story is done on purpose... huh... 😂 As long as the jokes are snappy and the fandom/fanfiction references get across, I'm happy with this story 😊 (I actually have been referencing several Luna fics throughout this story. The part about "WHAT DO YOU MEAN WE DON'T HAVE A FORMAL MILITARY???" is a direct quote from [I think] "How Luna Adopted a Griffon Hatchling (Against Her Will)" when Luna wants to take out some "enemies" [which, they have none] and Celestia informs her they don't have a formal military and thus can't afford to go into war frivolously. There were other references I've made but I don't remember what they were. So yeah, maybe I put a little more thought into this story than I thought 😅)
I coulda sworn that I left a comment here the other day, but I guess I got distracted. I very much enjoyed this story. Luna totally wrecked that fourth wall.
I'm just disappointed that nobody has gotten the "Toy Story" reference yet.
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I KNOW RIGHT?!?! And thank you, I was pleasantly surprised when this story didn't get downvoted to Tartarus
-sigh- back to those other 15 notifications now that showed up when I logged on today
Erm, akshually . . .