Scootaloo had always longed for flying, to feel the gush of wind pass by her as she took off. Only thing is that she had to practice, needed to be guided for it, but she has no one, until 'she' came in to her aid. It was then she realized that not every pegasus needed to fly.
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This is very good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
I hope Rainbow Dash will try to train her how to fly.
Set your target and keep trying until you reach it.
Here's a song that will make you do whatever it takes. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/HcNcOnIkQQU?si=5buln4h1vLWQD4i4
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Thanks! I hope to improve it
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You're welcome
(Squeal with excitement) I can't believe my ears! Rainbow Dash is to train Scootaloo to fly?! That's... GREAT! I can't to see how great she would do.
Here's a song that will make you natural. Enjoy!
https://youtu.be/V5M2WZiAy6k?si=O1gMwz6b38NcLxEE
Pretty good for a starter fanfic and I love the idea and concept. If I could give some constructive criticism however, you definitely could make it longer I feel like stuff happens too suddenly. Adding more detail to not just the big moments, this story is only big moments have some smaller moments in between. For instance when Scootaloo meets Rainbow Dash she has no interest in riding scooters. she doesn't even have a thought about it, but after one conversation she gives scooter riding a chance. Good opportunity to get some internal dialogue, make her think about it not just rainbow said to try im going to try it. There are many parts to this story where you can add more detail and emotion, to link the big moments together to make a more cohesive story. I think that if you do that you could produce some kick ass stories.I hope you keep writing and having fun with it.
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Thanks for the feedback! I'll try to be better (hope my other fanfic would cover up some of the poor writing I made with this one.)
That was great!
I'm giving you a trophy for finishing your I'm not worth it story. Congratulations. 🏆