A cartoony Sylveon who likes to write silly and over the top stories frequently featuring slapstick gags you'd generally find in looney tunes.
There is nothing the magic of friendship can't solve. Except the stupidity of her friends. Guess it's up to the recently crowned princess to put them in their place so they can save Equestria from the current threat at large.
Inspired by a scene in the season 4 episode: "Princess Twilight Sparkle: Part 2"
[WARNING:] Mild cartoon violence and extreme verbal roasting. (no profanity) Bring your marshmallows! It's about to get toasty in here!
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For God's sake. Learn how to write properly. Never have two characters speak in the same paragraph. Tree of Harmony is capitalized as well. And that's just in paragraph one
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Needs... a lot of work. I strongly suggest finding a good editor
Is this going to be part of a series? I don’t care that the spelling and grammar is a little off. I love this concept.
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This is a one shot. However, I do have an upcoming story in the works that I do plan to make part of a series.
As for the grammar, I am really curious why these comments seem to take a lot of issue with my grammar. I'll admit I'm not the best when it comes to writing stories; but I do proofread these things dozens of times until I think they are perfection.
I do my absolute best to make sure nothing is mis-spelled; however, I do admit that a common weak area I do tend to have with my writing is actually writing dialogue or quoting other people or sources. I have been notoriously terrible at it.
Any feedback helps.
Nice idea! This would have been much funnier to see in place of that episode
So, a violent OOC Twilight that does not add anything to the story and you apparently didn't read the formatting guidelines before submitting a story. While I have no issue with fix fics in general, having someone immediately jump to OOC violence after you spent several paragraphs repeating the line by line dialogue of part of an episode is just lazy writing. Especially when there was every opportunity for Twilight to deal with this in episode and get a story worth reading as a result. Either make it clear from moment one that the characters are just mouthpieces or keep them in character.
I'm sorry but this story is getting a dislike, as I couldn't even make it more than a hand full of paragraphs past where you stopped quoting before I stopped reading. I would have simply passed on the story if the opening paragraphs didn't lead me on but this story actively wasted my time.