This may be biased, but I see him saying Echo. also, he isn't running, he's tactically withdrawing.

After this romp, I can say in this alt that when Neil gets caught I wouldn't be surprised if Echo and Hearth to get protective of their claim. To the point Celestia assigns them to his personal Guard detail, were they make their frustration of their abandonment by him known constantly known to everypony they cross. XD

"How did those two get assigned the alicorn!?"

"Didn't you hear? He bucked them until they passed out, and then left them in the rain!"

"No.. buck me sideways, it can't be true."

"It is! Echo and Hearth tell everypony they meet that story while touching his flanks with their's! It's unfair! My stallion only complains I don't wash my dishes after eating."

Why you idiot?! WHY?!

Run Neil, Run!

...To Ponyville city, where the grass is green and mares are pretty!

Well this was lovely to watch.... I wonder if celly is next considering all that talk of alicorn style.

also my favorite part was definitely the cumflation of da womb! (its my weakness!)

So, if this is the 2nd of 7 sex scenes you wrote, I'm guessing that some of the other scenes are:
1. Neil getting a blowjob from Rainbow Dash
2. A threesome with the bat-pony guards from chapter 5 behind the bar, because they wanted to see if Neil was as good as Echo claimed
3. Luna arrives late when the Tantabus was in Neil's dream.

Well done keep it up!

I've been blown away a second time. Very well done, I look forward to the next entry.

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I'm sure there will be hardships to overcome in this story as well, as he weaves his way around the powers that be in Canterlot and beyond. ;P

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I mean, at some point Neil is going to bang one or both Princesses. It's inevitable at this point, with all of his interactions in the main story. But, which scene will it be is the question? XD

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Unfortunately, that's been copyright claimed up here in Canada. Can't watch it. But if memory serves, that was the one with evil mirror versions?... So, in your opinion, which Neil is good, and which is evil?

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Smaller, sleeker, more lithe rump, and a tight snatch to match... Yeah, I think Neil might be unconsciously developing a type for more athletic mares, over, shall we say, the type with a more plush and cushioned rump.

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Well, that's what this story is for! To find out what alternatives can happen, if only there was a touch more porn logic in the story. ;D

The RD scene is an obvious one. And I'll say it here and now, it's already written beginning to end. I just have to give it a personal edit pass, then hand it over for final editing. That, and the very first scene with Rarity, were the only two I fully completed during Nano. For the rest, if I hit any sort of writers block, I just skipped to the next scene. Nano is all about speed and word count, after all. XD

But, I'm posting in the order of events they happened (While also avoiding spoilers), so I have a few back burner scenes to go before the RD/Neil/Bulk threesome. ;D

As for a full squad of thestrals? Each with extremely sharp and pointy fangs all nibbling in various places at once? Neil's poor, adorable ears stand no chance at all!

And finally, the Tantabus. This'll be a bit of an odd one. Afterall, if Neil can bang Celestia and Luna out in the open, is his greatest fear really going to be the same? This scene needs some thought.

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Depends, really. Is Captain Buckler still the horny, sexually frustrated, and aggressive mare she always is? Is she going to deny any and all transfers to be the new Alicorn Stallions personal guard, like she did before? Who knows? Besides me, that is.

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A very angry mare capable of flight, and likely as strong as Echo lands nearby, and loudly accuses you of assaulting two of her fellow guards. And ponies are naturally more panicky and flighty, if the everyday Ponyville disaster is anything to go by. Thus, running. And how else was he gonna meet up with Bulk again? :D

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So many pretty mares, all over Equestria. But you know Canterlot. They'll try to keep him all to themselves. ;P

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The next scene in line is the least written of the bunch, plus focusing on the main story, so...

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You know in this kind of world it a matter of time before you find that one mare that is into latex, and I don't mean Dominatix, I mean cover head to tail in deep latex demanding to be use as some bizarre sex toy for Neil.

Boy would that be something new for him like "Ok I need to escape but this mare is gonna a get very aggressive...if I'm not aggressive with her? Seriously how did I end up in this situation?"

Would it be so bizarre if that mare turns out to be a high ranking noble, the top mare in the royal guard or heck one of the princesses

Also can't wait for the triple A next chapter and the "talk" Neil needs to have

Now I usually just browse fimfiction anonymously and refrain from commenting on alot of stuff nowadays but this is only the second piece of porn I've ever read twice.

(The first one being One size fits all.)

Usually i read it, judge it, and then forget about it going about my life outside of reading. but this just kept calling to me so instead of reading it like I did i took my time and comprehended every word in this chapter. and I got to say I've thought of something hillarious if your intending to listen.

So after reading another commenter about an "alicorn of fertility" I was thinking it would be hillarious if at the end of this story a taxpony came up to neil and was like "Sir. you owe several thousand bits in foal support" and the subsequent cascade that all that involves. it would be quite funny personally.

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But you’ll be a pal and let know right?

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I'm curious though, what would Neil's thoughts be on mares with bigger teats?

Also, if Neil is going to be porking either one of the Princesses, I think the scenario that pops up first would be during the dream sequence in the other story. A slutty Tantabus doing perverse acts on an all too willing Neil. Though if it has to be a nightmare that the Tantabus can feed from, the scene could be that Neil fears being made into a breading horse for alicorns.

Evil versions of the princesses; maybe include Twilight IDK, within the nightmare, would make it clear that his only purpose is to breed them and kickstart the alicorn race.

Hell, I can only imagine what would occur after waking up with a painfully obvious erection, someone's going to have to take care of the stallion's burden. And personally, it should fall to Luna, it was her fault for releasing the Tantabus, so it should be her throat that heals his ailment.

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Sooo your saying hes more likely to go after luna's rump than celestias round cakes?
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I cant seem to find that one? Little help please?

Mayhap we get a mini AAA-A of Neil dealing with his hangover?

Very nice

Looks like Neil is the alicorn of clapping cheeks, yowza.

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Sorry for the very late response but it is one of Roshi Rat's comments on the first chapter.

...Just want to be clear, is this chapter the clop version of your other SFW story?

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.... There is a surprisingly large amount of furries into that exact thing in Saskatchewan. Personally not into it, but I could see a very adventurous and naughty mare having herself delivered to Neil's room like that.

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May be a bit late, but thank you! I have a similar habit of not posting on too many stories. XD

As for the premise, I don't think it would be the tax pony since any and all foal support would be automatically withdrawn from Celestia's near unending supply of bits (If it worked that way. Proper studding contracts allow the Sire to stipulate how much interaction they want to have with the foal, which is usually none). However, it would be hilarious if a sudden wave of unexplained morning sickness hit Canterlot. At first it might be considered a new plague targeting mares... Only for:

1. Said mares to gossip, and find out they all banged a hot Alicorn stud.
and,
2. The docs to figure out what it is, and promptly congratulate all the mares on their out of season pregnancies.

One very awkward Day Court session later, where Celestia herself is also experiencing some physical discomfort, and Neil gets called in... Only to see all the mares he's banged in one place.

A flash of light.

Only for his cutie mark to finally appear- his penis buried to the hilt inside a vagina (Celestia's to be specific), with his balls slapping against her winking clit, and white cum dripping out from around their lewd union.

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Of course! You'll know when the chapter is released, obviously. ;D

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That is a good question. Neil does enjoy some hefty tiddies, but near the crotch? That would make them look like udders, which would be an odd hurtle in his mind to overcome. Plus, large tiddies tend to mean lactation, which would either mean the mare is pregnant, or a mother to a newborn foal (Unless there's a hormonal imbalance that caused it).

As for the Tantabus, and any fun time shenanigans that follow, I still have to plot and plan a few things. But fear not! This shall bring a new meaning to 'Wet Dream'. At least, I hope so. With such a grandiose statement, I'll likely fall short with my substandard skills.

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I believe it's these three comments, that you're looking for:
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Waking up from his hangover, and.... what? Finding himself surrounded by a pile of Lunar and Solar guards, all of which are smeared with dried sexual fluids (whether male or female cum), including himself?... And a smug looking Celestia standing over him with a camera, and an obvious desire to join in on the second morning round of the orgy?

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I try, and usually fail mind you, but I try.

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He does his duty, when surrounded with such needy mares... Unlike that other Neil.

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This is an Alternate Universe version of my main story, where I post things that went a bit smuttier than intended. ^^
None of these smut scenes happened in the main story. (Unless clearly marked as part of the main story, which will never happen at this rate. XD)

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Eh is there is a thought I bet there is a fetish for it

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An all male orgy or orgy involving night and day guards would be interesting. It would force Neil to confront that all important question that every "straight" male has. Do females do it better or do males? And I won't lie, the way these big booty twinks be throwing it back, be having me breathless.

I'm talking slamming it, gyrating it, throwing it in a circle, and going back for more before I've even recovered. If Neil gets to experience that, he best be careful, an experienced twink will drain you till your nuts resemble raisins.

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Yeah, let's go with that.

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I really want that scenario now... Especially because of the cakeflanks part. That was strangely specific. Is it supposed to metaphorically mean fuck equestria?

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HAHAAHAHAHA! Talk about exhibitionism! Ho, that would be hilarious.

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Wait hang on, is Luna standing next to Celestia? Or did neil not bang her yet and shes chuckling off to the side or something. Also assuming Cadence isnt there because hubby.

Nice