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Upon her airship being forced off course into the storm's arena, Kerfuffle knew something bad was going to happen. She prepared for it all the same, as she would any other adventure. However, this time survival comes with a cost--her leg.
A minorly gory yet inspiring origin story for Kerfuffle.
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I have mixed feelings about this story. One one hand, it was well-written (at least on a high level), with good pacing and appropriate restraint regarding the gory elements. On the other hand, the prose was a bit hard to follow at times, with many instances of awkward phrasing. My biggest complaint, however, is that this story seems very unfitting as a backstory for someone like Kerfuffle. If the story had not told us explicitly that the main character was Kerfuffle, I never would have guessed it, because nothing we know about the dorky fashion designer leads us to believe she was once some aeronautic adventurer or something.
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Thank you for the feedback. Writing long, long term action sequences is something I am constantly improving upon, so I will take this to heart.
Admittedly, it is a degree OOC for Kerfuffle. I had this idea to write some Kerfuffle fic, and it spoke to my heart to write this, so that is mostly why. I'm sure there are plenty of ways to write and tie it into Kerfuffle was we know her. But those wouldn't exactly enhance or fit well into the story itself.
If you think this is best tagged, as an AU, do let me know.