• Member Since 3rd Sep, 2012
  • offline last seen Jul 23rd, 2013

Derpsanddinks404


Just your average writer. 14, freshman, and about two months being a brony. I absolutely HATE shipping, excluding the occasional Fluttermac or OC.

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All young must grow old. All old must eventually die. Ponies are no exception. And death is ignorant of friendship, so each friend usually dies alone, leaving their other friends to weep as they themselves wait for the absolution to possibly join their friends. Twilight is the last of her pony friends to go. And Spike, being a dragon, must watch as the only mother he's known say her final words.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 7 )

Well, it made me cry many tears. Can't ask for more than that.

I noticed a few tense shifts, but other than that, I don't really have much to say. It was fairly predictable, but touching at the same time. Certainly better-written than other death stories I've read.

You are an amazing writer. SO MANY FEELS! :pinkiesad2::raritycry::raritydespair::raritydespair::applecry::heart::raritycry::raritydespair:

However i do feel as though the ending were rushed a wee bit. I mean, it is his last moments with her. I would consider also to immerse the story more into the memories they share. Make them just that much more meaningful instead of just scratching the surface.

I hope I help!

Thanks! Glad you guys like it!:pinkiehappy: This is my first sad fic, and I'm usually one for dark stories. I myself was on the verge of tears writing this, and was beginning to think others wouldn't feel the same. Glad it does!:eeyup:

I'm working on an epilogue for this, but I can't promise anything soon. I'm currently also working on another fanfic called "A Twisted Crush", which is a Feathertwist type crush fic.

1392866 i cried at the scene in the first pokemon movie where ash ets turned to stone how about you guess how I felt reading about this whole story P.S love the way you described how they died but could you explain about how fluttershy died? all you said was 'she went quietly in her sleep' do you mean old age? and not sure if you know but twilight=alicorn=celestia/luna=eternal life without showing age

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