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Visharo


"Creativity flows when boredom grows." -The Bored Author (of Doom)

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Resources are dwindling, the three tribes are getting worried so ideas are being put out there. Digging for more became the new plan. It became the new trend, the fashion, the statement of the century. Then, before they knew it, they dug too far.
Sunny Starscout lives in a world of fear and darkness. Time for her to live up to her name.


Inspired by the video game of the same name, several youtube videos I happened upon, and the prompts of Bean's Writing Group.

Written for both the A Thousand Word Contest and The New Blood Contest
Bonus prompts are 1: "From the beginning, you know the end.." and 2: "Include a bug."
For the record, this is not really a crossover. No prior knowledge, characters, or even technically the world comes from the inspiration. It's just that, inspiration.
Knock em both out with a single story, hurrah!

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Comments ( 8 )

Why isn’t there a crossover tag?

The fact that you didn't use a Balrog is massively disappointing. But nope. You devolved changelings back into these things... :facehoof:.

"Sunny! There you are!" The mare in question groaned and slowed down. The caller, Princess Rip Ride, the daughter of a very dear friend. Sunny never did approve of the name though and she made sure she mentioned that every time she met her. If only she could still do that.

I have so many questions here. Mostly just who the mom is. Royal title narrows it massively down to Zipp or Pipp.

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I know, I knoooooow. I wanted to use a balrog, but then there would be two crossovers! Also, I needed to use a bug, part of the assignment.
As for the mom, who knoooooows

Comment posted by Visharo deleted Jul 28th, 2023

"Hey, Sunny. The usual?" The bartender, Alphalittle, took over the bar after Alphabittle died in the first attack. Nopony really knows his real name, just that he took on that name as a legacy. Sunny could respect that.

oh dang, what happened here?

The mining company got too greedy and dug too deep. An army not seen for a millennia awoke and ravaged the world. The masses spread across the skies, leaving Equestria in darkness. The changelings, attacking anypony in sight drove the three tribes underground where they keep their supplies, food, and heat to a minimum.

oof, that explains it! a fascinating idea for the future of this setting

The caller, Princess Rip Ride, the daughter of a very dear friend. Sunny never did approve of the name though and she made sure she mentioned that every time she met her. If only she could still do that.

rip (literally (to Pipp))

"You know just as everypony else that my alicorn powers no longer work. They haven't since the wendigoes." Sunny closed her eyes trying to keep the painful memories at bay. "I'm tired now. Goodbye Rip."

oof! turns out that all of the horrors of the world of G4 were a bit too much for the fledgling civilization of the G5 ponies, which makes a lot of sense

Taking a deep breath, Sunny flared open her translucent wings and flew upwards. She was selfish, she knew that, but her powers were the only things that still felt like hers. Nopony was going to take that away.

ooh, i like that!

"None of this is real. I exist for you to have this conversation. You exist because of a toy company. This world exists because of an idea."

oh that is getting real meta real fast

"Ah, but did she? These stories are history, yet the world looks like this. This frozen hellscape. Did she save the world? You escape this world by going into the past where similar dangers appear and consequences just as similar. Perhaps it is not the past at all, but another world. Escapism, what a beautiful concept. Perhaps you are a story yourself, Sunny, and we are all looking in."

and ending on a very meta note! an intriguing mix of ideas, thank you for writing!

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Thank you! Glad you liked it

Ooh, double entry. Very daring.

An intriguing concept, but it stops rather than ends. There’s no resolution to the mysterious mare’s proclamation. Heck, there’s not even a response. The entire story stops mid-conversation and leaves nothing resolved. (Possibly because Sunny understood the message and blasted you for putting her through this frozen hell. Rude, but understandable. :raritywink:)

The big challenge for the Thousand Words contest was fitting an entire story into that single kilowrd, and I’m sad to say you didn’t manage that here. That said, you do have the start of something intriguing. I hope you build on it.

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It was an experiment. I think I did alright in terms of storybuilding, but yeah. There are some stories best to no word limits.

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