Discord and Fluttershy spend a relaxing moment in a cenote on the Yutucán peninsula. The waters may be calm but the mind is always restless. Gleeful memories and dreams come afloat the surface, but so does a bittersweet reminder that deep below the water lurks the memory of decisions taken in the past.
Tw: Sex allusions but nothing explicit, this is more of a 'pouring the heart out' kind of thing.
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This was beautiful. Early on you have a few mix up's of "he" when it's her, and "her" when it's he, but otherwise this was fantastic.
The raw emotion though, and showing Discord's thoughts on it all, that was fantastic. Excellent characterization, and that goes for Flutter's too!
Also, congrats on your first Fimmy Fic post! With this writing quality, you'll do quite well here I'd say.
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Thank you for your comment, I'm glad the reading and characterization was enjoyable. At first I was planning on posting th multichap fic I'm working on but I was afraid of how it could be recieved, so I decided to start with something small first.
If it isn't a bother, Could you please point out where I did the mix ups to fix them? I must admit I'm testing the waters regarding writing, even more in English as it isn't my first language, so I have a hard time recognizing where the mistakes are jaja
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Sure, sure. I will PM (personal message) you here on Fimmy Fic.