I need to learn how to write fimfics that don’t involve Fluttercord lol
Zephyr Breeze gets invited to Fluttershy’s cottage for a get together with Fluttershy and Discord. Discord is unhappy about this, as he and Zephyr don’t get along well. The get together ends in disaster, and Discord and Zephyr have to figure out how to fix things...even if it means solving a friendship problem together.
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I am reminded of this image:
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It’s a tad fast-paced, especially at the “solving the friendship problem” part.
Other than that, this is amazing for a first story on FimFiction! Keep up the lovely work!
Will there be more?
The pace of the story is a bit too fast...especially since it only takes a minute or so at the tea party for them to both start snapping at each other and for Fluttershy to get upset.
But, it was an enjoyable read. A first good Fluttercord Week story, with Zephyr and Discord bonding and figuring out that Fluttershy is what they have in common. Keep up the good work!
In response to everybody’s comments,
Unfortunately, for now, this was about as much writing power my brain had for this one. Not to mention I wanted to make sure I got it in on time. I did kind of struggle a bit on the part with Twilight, where I knew I wanted her involved in helping Zeph and Discord figure out their issues, but elaborating more proved to be a bit tricky. At least the story is uploaded into the group now, so I can go back and edit it if I ever wanted to! :)
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Celestial Rainstorm’s DA art! I’ve gotten commissions done from her a few times!