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Destroyed not destoryed, she not their. But that might be awesome foreshadowing to future chapters. Looks like amazing begins to a potentially epic saga. I would recommend trying for a lot more transitions between scenes, and background and scene details. But the plot seems very good, the rushed sense might be part of the plot though... anyways in my opinion wanted or not, with all that would do leaps and bounds for improvement.
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I can agree with what you are saying, because honestly aside from a few things here and there, this is looking like it could be something good.
Great work can't wait for more
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Glad you liked it
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Thanks for the feed back
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Thank you for your approval.
This story is interesting. If you need to borrow an OC, let me know.
Great work here I like this story alot
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Can you pm me a description?
Nice end to the chapter keep up the good work
Very good I can't wait for the next chapter
Great chapter and nice thing blue blood did for lavender dream