Sombra invades Canterlot after Twilight Sparkles fails to find the Crystal Heart to save the Empire. Celestia and Sombra have one final battle. (AU for Season 3: The Crystal Empire, parts 1 and 2.)
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Interesting... very interesting. The concept is quite nice, and the ending definitely held a good foreboding nature to add onto the open-endedness. However, Sombra didn't exactly feel fleshed out at all. Most of his dialog was heavily limited, and he definitely went down far to fast and easily, even with Celestia's choice of tactics.
The fight didn't last nearly as long as it could of been, and certain portions of the story felt rushed in ways. Regardless, this is quite an interesting tale, for it puts to motion one of the most powerful elements that the darkness hosts. Corruption. And once that little seed is planted, there's almost nothing you can truly do to stop it from growing out of control.
Nice job!
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Thank you! I am hoping to expand on this one day but I haven't had much time or motivation to write so I drew the picture and the story came to my mind as I drew it. I will probably rewrite it in the future.
This Is good Good amount of suspense In a short story
Yeah, Celestia is no stranger to the Darkness. I like how that little scene in S2 (or was it S3? eh, one word--early in the show) paved way to so much possible depth of the character. The devil is truly is in the details.