Sunset shimmer blames herself for everything that happens to her friend's. Rainbow however disagrees and makes her think otherwise.
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"Your," not "you're."
uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
punctuation and stuffs
yeah
you get it
Wow. Have you never read a book? Have you ever in your life ever seen dialogue written that way? And what's with the weird paragraph settings? This reads as if you wrote it in about five minutes or less, with zero spell check and only the barest grasp of grammar and punctuation.
Seriously, you have some work to do before you can call yourself a writer. This Writing Guide will help.
Good luck!
I actually felt my balls retract while trying to read this...
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Look i understand if you don't like the story or the writing.
I'm still new to this whole writing stories thing
I appreciate the Writing Guide and all but you don't have to be rude.
I will try my best to get better overtime
So have a good day!
I wouldn’t say it was ALL her fault, but she did play a part in it.
You have nothing to apologize for sunset. This isn't your fault. These things happen whether we like it or not.
She's right.
This story was good as all but there's many things in this story than need to be changed edit wise. Like spaces for example.
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Thank you and yes I will go back and fix it.
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Good since it needs a lot of fixing if you ask me.