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SonicandMLPFan


Just what the name implies ;)

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She genuinely thought it would work...

Sunny Starscout has lost all hope, after her search for the crystals turned out to be all for nothing, she wanted nothing more to do than to just go home and accept defeat.

But can a letter from an old family member be enough to lift the downhearted earth pony's spirits?

(Alternate take on the scene where Sunny finds the earth pony crystal)

(SPOILERS FOR MLP: A NEW GENERATION!)

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Comments ( 7 )

Sunny immediately stopped reading the letter after she heard that, "There was, a third crystal?" Sunny thought. She then immediately slapped herself on the head for her ignorance. "Of course! Why didn't I think of that, I should've questioned why only the unicorns and pegasi had crystals!" Sunny scolded herself.

I wondered why she was so dumb and didn’t even think for a moment that there might have been a third crystal! :facehoof: This part was so funny! :pinkiehappy:

This was such a great story!

A bit rough around the edges (particularly in the grammar department), but all in all, this was a fun extension of that particular scene. Not bad!
:)

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Thanks, anything that needs improvement?

Awww, this story was so sweet!

For your first story you wrote on this site, it was really well done! :pinkiesmile:

I liked that you explored more on the background of crystals and what made the pony races divided in the first place, something I wished was included in the movie. And it was also very sweet and emotional as Sunny remembered her father and as she was reading his final words in his letter.

Overall, you did a great job! :twilightsmile:

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Thanks, glad you enjoyed it!

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