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YourUncleFuncle


It’s a sweet, magic, fast, posh, fun, cute brony life!

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Rainbow Dash ordered a really personal item that she doesn’t want anypony to know about. When she realizes there is a defect in the order, she intends to return it. Due to a mix up it is instead sent to her friend Fluttershy, and now she must get it back without anypony noticing while there’s a party going on at Fluttershy’s cottage.

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Comments ( 11 )

You’re a really good writer, YourUncleFuncle. This was such a pleasant read, even though it wasn’t very long. But sometimes there are parts of a story that I just really really like, such as, that paragraph about the napping habits of Rainbow (silly and, again, pleasing to read). And the part where she reads/writes Fluttershy’s letters. I liked that too.
All around, you did quite well on this fic, and it was really relaxing reading through it. :twilightsmile:

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Wow thanks! I’m really happy you liked it. Thanks so much for the kind words!

This has me interested and I definitely want to see where it goes. I enjoy your writing overall and you've done a good job of making Rainbows plight something I'm invested in. I do kinda wish you had lingered on the moment she got the package a little more, really get into why she wanted it and subsequently why she'd be so embarrassed if anyone found out. definitely consider yourself liked and tracked.

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Wow, thanks! I honestly I thought I’d just end the story there, but it’s still on the fence. I’m still considering either option. Thanks for the tip, it’s something I’m trying to work on, getting into more detail with emotions.

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Oh, I didn't even notice it was marked as finished. Too bad, but it was fun while it lasted. If you did do more, then maybe to not compromise your original story you could do some kind of choose your own ending sort of thing. Just an idea, feel free to ignore me. Either way, good story.

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Oh, and thanks for the follow too. I hate that this site doesn't have a friending function.

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That’s not a bad idea. I only marked it as complete because that could theoretically be the end. I may add another chapter just to wrap everything up, though.

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No problem. Sorry your comment loaded after I finished writing mine.

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I CRAVE MORE~

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Ended on a cliffhanger, although due to me coming back and reading it, I'll probably add another chapter soon tbh

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