Freedom's call: Writers Cut

Black--Soul #1 · May 30th, 2021 · 1 · · A special bond ·

“He declared war on Japan. Special Forces were inserted into Japan with the goal of capturing ‘strategic targets’, specifically Japan's nuclear power plants. They destroyed one power plant, causing a massive radiation leak and forcing thousands of Japanese citizens to evacuate from cities and towns, with the Special Forces taking over 26 nuclear plants, most near metropolitan areas. Due to the throat of total annihilation, Japan surrendered. During the conflict, a large number of American citizens that were in Japan were taken hostage by Korea. The governments between the GKR and the United States came to an agreement to return the U.S. captives, but only in small numbers at a time due to the costs involved. With a population of hundreds of thousands of Americans in Japan and Korea, it was expected to take over ten years to return everyone.” He paused, taking a breath.

Threat - needs fixing

It was understanding for her. He didn’t want to die, afraid of suffering for the actions of others. And it was likely to happen. Yet, she knew the Americans had standards, rules of war and that some people would not judge one on the actions of others.

understandibel - if im not mistaken.
Alsi offical yes, practicaly they broke it literally always! Germany in ww2, in the Vietnam war, even in Afghanistan...

“Scotch…I’m gonna…” Chung was at his limit. Letting out another moan, he blew his seed into the foal’s mouth. Surprisingly, she managed to swallow every drop of his white seed.

You stated his dick literally bulged out her throat.
throat - must be exchanged for mouth.

She grunted with a painful expression. But the pain began to slowly die away and was replaced with pleasure. Scotch Tape was tight, but it stimulated Joon very much, yet he was careful not to hurt her. It was something unique for him. So it was for the young pony.

Dont you need to at ' he ' to make it more fluid. Mind you, i might be mistaken...

The filly’s belly started to bulge from the big load, yet Scotch Tape loved every second of it.

Jesus how huge balls did he need to buldge a pony mares womb out with cum

Good that ponies can’t be pregnant by humans…

impregnated

It was a nice day, calm and the sun shined as he, Kate, Amy and Chang spend the day in the garden, eating cake and drinking lemonade as suddenly, the doorbell rang and Joon answered it.

Was he named ' Chung '

“Yes, Chung. You are a father now.”

' a ' needs to be added if im not wrong...

Overall neat story. But for my taste a bit to fast over...

Bronycommander

Bronycommander #2 · May 30th, 2021 · 2 · · A special bond ·

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well, that was my very first work in terms of clop. But you are free to help me out if you like

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Black--Soul #3 · May 30th, 2021 · 1 · · A natural understanding ·

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I can recommend some storys as examples but i will be bussy with the other sex scene adding more foreplay and details here and there.

Since i have no idea what character Chung is i rather not assume his actions. Than again a quicky is good enough for a 'head up' scene... Just slightly sucks he get only one shot out before getting his life changed forever

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Bronycommander #4 · May 30th, 2021 · 1 · · A natural understanding ·

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Yeah

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Black--Soul #5 · May 30th, 2021 · 1 · · A widow's heart ·

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“Okay, I keep that in mind.” Kate acknowledged before yawing. They both then took the dishes to the dishwasher and brushed their teeth.

yawning

He’s a horse, it would be Bestiality! Then again…he’s as intelligent as a human, a sapient being…would it really count?

Spaces after the points.
Also they are no beasts. Since they are sapient. That my view

Now, the unicorn took a step back. “I can take care of this myself.” He tried to defuse the situation but saw despair in the human’s eyes.

care - needs to be added.

Fletcher couldn’t describe what was driving him as his horn lit up, gently removing her top and bra, blushing. During his stay, he always respected her wish to look away when she got dressed and now, he actually saw her naked.

A willing female begging for his load... What ever could be the reason for him to comply?

Her breasts were c-cup in size, her build average, nothing special and yet…he felt somehow excited to see her like this.

Space after the points.

In the early morning, Fletcher yawned and stretched himself, feeling something warm around him. “Good morning.” Kate smiled warmly at him .

Point at the very end is missing!

”Morning.” He replied before got up, the former getting dressed.

“I'm Mid-Mite.” Midnight’s foal drone introduced himself, causing the unicorn and Pegasus to break out in laugher.

laughter - your missing the laughter 't'

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Black--Soul #6 · May 30th, 2021 · 1 · · A widow's heart ·

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Nice chapter over all. Im surprised how fast she could fit him in Sometimes a extended stretch adds to the fun describtion

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Bronycommander #7 · May 30th, 2021 · 2 · · A widow's heart ·

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thank you. I took inspiration from a erotic text game for this scene

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Black--Soul #8 · May 30th, 2021 · · · A natural understanding ·

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Its better than the previous chapter. Still a few detail couldnt hurt. Literally probably preventing that Well i be off for now. Read you later

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