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Love this story
The spelling mistakes... the grammar... the lack of logic... so many errors...
Impressive how nice ponys are... In many storys there rather... Skittisch. Anyway good start
Hm... Interesting idea. Albeit it might be better to not have the ponies know he just hatched as it would be more logical. I mean, Bright Mac acted rather strange if he knew Spyro just hatched. He accepted his ability to speak or general knowledge rather easily. Not to mention how Bright Mac told a dragon that just hatched to move his derriere down the stairs for breakfast, instead of carrying him, like he did with Applejack.
Which reminds me...how young is Applejack? Does she talk? She didn't in this chapter and I have trouble to guess which age she is.
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Maybe a few days old i wanted her and Spyro to be around the same age
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And my original idea was for Celestia to find his egg but then i thought the apple family might be better
puppets? when could spyro do that?
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He can't but he bought the living puppet spell from wizard101 so now he can
Instead of Wizard 101 why not have done Mezmerelda?
To be fair, she'd been around since before Ponyville was founded.
Eight of them, actually. If I remember correctly.
Awww... Baby Dragon Still confused the Ponys are so chill about a 1-2 days old beeing able to Breath fire/Lightning,speak and cast spells
Awesome start I hope he can keep the apple parents alive .
I start to re-read now again. Hope Logic errors later on are fixed by now...
Edit: 2021 - Still needs edits in format and grammar.
It's not edited very well.
It says edited, but there are still quite a lot of errors and incorrect grammar, like run-on sentences/missing punctuation. It's an interesting story premise, but it's a bit difficult to read. I'll carry on in the hopes that it gets better.
...their reaction to his speaking is far too unrealistic.
Same grammar issues as the first. Other than that, everyone seems to completely lack emotion and have absolutely no reaction to things they absolutely should have a strong reaction to.
Even if I decide not to continue reading, my offer to help and give some advice will still stand. Though I will at least read the next couple chapters. PM me if you're interested.
Spyro just got reborn yesterday...
Is he still in mental shock?
Nice chapter