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As if displaced wasn't bad enough, here we have unedited, sloppily-written displaced. Worse still, your comment section is full of suck-ups stroking your ego and making you think this kind of crap is acceptable. It isn’t.
9847617
I can write my story however i want and if they want to read it they can i only do this becuse i want to not becuse someone told to and no one is paying me to do this so what right do you have to say that you don't have to read it and yet you forced yourself to so dont go around insulting people just for doing something they want to do becuse in the end it will just make peope say hateful things on your stores, and then poeple will just flat out ignore any comment you make.
9847634
I'll just leave this here: I like this story, the grammar is so much better then the start, congrats on that, an I hope to see more soon
9847672
Thank you but their might be a little more time between chapters becuse i have been working on a few things 3 things to be exact and you might see one or two of them soon
9847681
Yeah, take your time, and I've seen some fics on this site with a grammar so bad that was unreadable, I like to see authors making progress
Please move this comment out of the main text of the chapter to author's comments section above or below. I do understand that you feel sorry for this "race", but it was actually expected. The original episode with the race were only interesting due to RD/AJ bickering. If they wouldn't be there watching Twi running the marathon would be borderline boring and reading about it would be just boring.
You could add some dialog at the starting line with someone he know, though. And maybe short exchanges during the race. Maybe a bit more pressure since Spyro just went ahead from the beginning and never ever fell behind. And I'm quite positive he is not the only one capable to run fast in the entirety of Ponyville. Especially if we take into consideration that ponies are built better for running than dragons.
What were actually jarring is how abruptly short it felt. It wasn't a marathon, but a short distance race for 30-60 seconds tops. So, unfortunately, this was a rush job. I do understand you have life and it happens, but honestly if you don't have any ideas for the main event in your mini-arc then maybe put it aside out of the story and work on something else in the story? And only wave it back in when you'll have ideas for it.
9847617
also trying to suck up to him by downvoting your comment.
9854344
If you don't like the story you don't have to read it he forced himslef to read it even though he obverusly didn't like it. its his own fault his comment was disliked
Please continue this story it's quite nice
9861998
I am but i am switching between this one and another i working one each day one day i might work on this one and the next i work on one of my others
Time is ticking tik-tok. You are running it is coming. Tik-tok... no matter if you walk run or hide. Tik-tok... Ones the clock is running out of time its over. A day a year a decade... In the end your clock screams its over... May the Apples rest in peace ones it happens...
Prepare the thread and scissors. The time is close.
This chapter is pretty mutch fine as it is
Wait...
Did you just broke into a Delivery room STILL IN PROGRESS
This was a epic chapter I'm happy Spyro won and Buttercup is ok.
I'm enjoying this story :)
Would it be okay if I pointed out a few errors for this page?
10256999
Sure it's fine
The sensible idea would have been to move Applejack and BigMac to the barn where the screaming would not be so loud ...
Just saying...
Sooo chapter 5 - 15... Making something useful out of it will be a challenge with 5-8 being unusable
Still... Challenge accepted
Maybe the ponies used untreated lumber that Timberwolve magic could use?
He grow up on the farm, but that probably only counts as strength training with apple bucking, but more strength usually causes increased speed and endurance after all.
Spyro is a dragon... why didn't Celestia give him a messenger dragon flame enchantment/spell, she did it with Spike.
Just saying