Hello! I'm a beginning writer and I'm hoping to get better! Wish you all a fantastic day!
Equestria gets attacked by dangerous creatures known as the "Heartless". How will our heroes deal with the unseen before danger? Will all of Equestria be lost?
Don't go too hard on me on this one. It's my first fic 
(and hopefully good enough)
Be sure to give me some feedback 
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nice work on both chapters.
GO KINGDOM HEARTS( I still think the ending of KH3 is as bad as Infinity war) the rest of the game is good tho
Oh, this is so rushed and Twilight knowing what the heartless and the keyblade is feels off.
I'll track it to see where it goes but I don't think it's starting out well :/
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Yeah, sorry. I guess i did rush at that part.
I think i'm gonna remake it from scratch so it makes sense And doesn't feel rushed.
EDIT:
Yeah, i'm pretty sure i'm going to remake this.
Tbh i'm not really satisfied with it either.
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Best wishes.
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Thanks ^^ Also thanks for pointing out my mistake.
I remade the existing chapters, hope it's better now and makes more sense!
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Okay, that comment actually motivated me to continue this. I will find some time on the upcoming days And write another chapter.
Thank you for feedback ^^
A little hurried on, but a nice chapter! Damn, you did it even better than me trying to do a beginning like this 4 times! *Applauses* Good job, mate!
Thanks!
Yeah, I'm having problems with expanding sentences and descriptions, and sometimes i lack words that I want to use but I'm trying to improve, thanks !
Reading your author's note, I noticed something and I would like to ask you... Which is your native language?
Polish is my native language.
nice work
What kind of worlds will our heroes be going to? Just the Disney ones or otherwise? Or maybe both?
Well, this is certainly an improvement. Even if it's so short, the story is so well focused that it manages to convey enough to keep the pace going.
You have improved.
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Not sure yet.
Depends on how things will turn out.
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I hope you'll get back to this and have the next update/chapter in the near future because I'm curious as to what happens next!^_^
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Forgive me for my impatience, but r u ever getting back to this? I understand if it's due to the corona virus epidemic; not to mention that you have a personal life and I respect that. It's just that I REALLY want to know what happens next.
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Wow, I did not expect that someone will like this story so much.
To answer your question, Yes, i'm going to continue this story.
nice work
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Thanks a lot, really appreciate it ^^
i hope to see more of this in the near future! You're doing awesomely! ^^
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Thanks a lot! really appreciate it!
Come back to this story when u got free time, k ;)